billions of heartbeats later

billions of heartbeats later

 

 

 

pterodactyl wings

dinosaur disdain, still felt

like you were some kind of prehistoric love

 

that died in a meteor shower of selfishness

and i?

the Triceratops to your T-Rex indifference

 

found myself a satiating meal

for your greedy appetite

leaving nothing but a few small remains

 

bones of a heart

to fossilize

and be found millions of years later

 

by some Anthropologist who may piece

the relics of me back together, enough

to make sense

of what i once was.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/11/16

Reviews

[Miss Sharon]

(bones of a heart to fossilize and be found millions of years later by some Anthropologist who may piece the relics of me back together, enough to make sense of what i once was.) Awesome word painting Jacob! Me thinks you are much too young to become fossilized yet! Great writing...as always. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sharon...yes, wish i were much too young, but alas.

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

A very nice theme to write about. The title is pretty interesting and so is the poem. A very deep-thought and vividly-expressed piece of poetry. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[Carolynn]

From one bone an entire dinosaur can be recreated so surely one small piece of a broken heart could be made whole again with the right hands :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is true, Carolynn...very true

thank you,

j.

[Papaya]

The days of love gone by do leave us feeling like we were devoured by something monstrous that chewed up the best part of who we were. Good poem Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana....

j.

[Shannon]

found myself a satiating meal
for your greedy appetite
leaving nothing but a few small remains

Such an original way of conveying a common theme:consumed, chewed up, spit out, eaten alive, etc.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you S.Mi


appreciate your kind words

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sometimes our past loves make us feel like dinosaurs. p.s., in the last stanza, did you mean to put in a "to" after enough?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh yes, where did it go..thanks for the catch.

[Lyn Anderson]

you are very welcome, and generally, hard to catch :)

[Alfred Kukitz]

Going back a bit are we?

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a bit....thank you Al.

j.