Doing Time

Doing Time

 

 

 

the jury sentenced me

to life, 

with you,

 

i have savored 

every moment of confinement----

especially all the privileges

 

earned from sharing 

with the perfect cellmate---

 

so much so,

i shall turn down any chance

for parole

 

and hope our sentence

becomes an eternal essay

of love.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/9/16

Reviews

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

True love can do this to a couple. I am happy to be a "lifer" myself! I enjoyed this piece very much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon...and congrats on being a "lifer."

j.

[V]

What a lovable hope wrapped in your well-chosen words. I could sense the journey you went on while loving/being with someone who means a lot. I agree with Andrew below, it definitely reflects a soulmate feeling, particularly in your first stanza.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vanessa.

j.

[V]

You're welcome as always.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes maybe this love will continue in the afterlife, as soulmates . What a privilege to love that long!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i wouldn't know what that is like, :) but wow...my folks were married for 70 years...

now that is a sentence....and i think for them, mostly a positive, happy one.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

me neither but my parents were married for 50yrs and were friends from the age of nine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is a long , long time too, andrew....

we don't see that much these days...

[Lyn Anderson]

Sentenced to life. How wonderful that seems, and how distant, to me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...

yes, it is distant to me, as well.....

sometimes i wish what i wrote were more true in real life...but alas---

j.

[William Liston]

This poem is short and sweet. I really enjoyed it. Just curious, why do you write informally?

-William Liston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am more of a conduit when it comes to poetry, i just put the words down as they come--

read morei am more of a conduit when it comes to poetry, i just put the words down as they come--

thank you for your kind words,

j.

[Papaya]

Sentenced to love... Now, that's a life sentence that doesn't seem all that bad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Gentle Breeze....

j.

[Ed Hart]

well here's a love song, full of refinement, and the kind of confinement devoutly to be wished...nicely done jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ed.

j.

[Cassie]

whoop whoop!!! this is a sweet sweet poem that makes me feel like it has been read to me and the one reading it to me sweeps me off the floor and carries me to an alone place

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cassie.

j.

[barleygirl]

I love the way your message takes a surprising turn -- wanting to remain in confinement, instead of wanting to break free. You've expressed the allure very well, I can feel the narrator being drawn into this situation. As always, you pick a metaphor & milk it to the very last drop with many related references: "cellmate" . . . "parole" . . . "sentence" . . . and my favorite: "eternal essay of love."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl.

j.

[Bacchus]

trapped with the right one...
heaven.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bacchus.

j.