Assembly Required

Assembly Required

 

 

 

this contraption,

my heart,

directions were misprinted

something missing,

 

i had no idea how to put love together,

forgot key steps,

and when it tried to walk on its own

 

my heart

imploded

 

forgot to fill out the warranty 

now, stuck with a broken self.

 

 

 

6/3/16

Reviews

[V]

Your closing lines made me smile, a sort of witty ending to a rather lost mood. I can relate to your lines, particularly to "i had no idea how to put love together". Sometimes I think you partly write down my life, it's a lovable feeling yet often sad, as well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating, Vanessa...all we can hope for is that our words might reach out and touch someone.

j.

[V]

That's so true and I am still surprised how often this actually works.

[Carolynn]

oh those darned instructions that so many refuse to read - do they even exist? :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

most of the time they are left out.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

We can't help it. We fall whether we want to or not, and we keep going back for more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we tend to do that....

thanks, KL

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Dear Jacob,

I can offer a pacemaker, defibulator and a lending ear.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

okay...will take you up on all of them...

j.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I like this poem. It is a great parody, and it made me feel both light and dark at the same time. Just to be clear that is a good thing, insert big smile here.

Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, H.L.
j.

[James]

How do you mend a broken heart? How do you trust again? I really enjoy your metaphorical writing. It really causes the reader to think and consider.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, James.
j.

[W.k.kortas]

As is your wont, the metaphor is tightly drawn from start to finish, well-stitched together and finely built--much more so, sadly, than the hastily-built heart we all seem to come equipped with.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, W.k.

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

When you give your heart to someone then two things are possible- one, the person gives her heart in return, two, the person returns your heart after it has been broken. The latter situation is more common. Your work is always fascinating and full of emotions.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for our insightful words, Vatsal.
j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Nothing heavy to carry around then a broken heart, I think the fixing is in the lightening it up. Great metaphor work, Jacob:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true about the "lightening up"
thank you, Pryde
j.

[andrew mitchell]

a lovely metaphor on a broken heart. well said in your unique skilled style jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew....

j.