up there

up there

 

 

 

on the side of the winding lake

the road takes the same twists and turns

 

mountain meth

the highway full of potholed pills 

 

his waters stirred in chaos...

the smoke rises in acrid scent

 

mind veers off pavement

a few memories survive

 

the rest drown in concrete whirlpools

superfluous wounds,

 

the drug of age

slowly kills 

but quickly mitigates the splash of thoughts

 

and the heart capsizes

as it watches the deterioration

of the peaks 

into small hills of quaint refuge

 

and then, common dust.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/27/16

Reviews

[KWP]

yes - it is the drug of age - a horrible one at that - grabbing onto you quickly - suffocating all your senses to the this worldly slowly - it's an ugly thing - makes the user ugly without even noticing the change - shame - horrible drug - addiction too fast - gone ...

great piece Jacob X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, KWP,
j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Vivid imagery and intelligent use of words have bedecked your poem. Emotions, feelings and profound musings gives the reader a new perspective of the things you have talked of here. Lovely poem. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

A poetic swan dive into self destruction from overdose. The poem rings with a tour de force!

Bravo Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.

j.

[V]

Rich in images and words perfectly stirring those, what an emotional superbly written outburst. You take the reader on a fantastic journey. Your words take hold of one strongly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vanessa,
j.

[Jamestown]

Another gem my talented friend:)
Metaphorical genius in an overdose of great wording,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and thank you, Jamestown, for your always encouraging reviews...

j.