hyphens and moon dances

hyphens and moon dances

 

 

finally happened,

the inevitable

last night, 

the muse and i broke up,

 

but then we talked

one thing led to another

and we ended up

on the sheets

 

there were ellipses of eloquent touching

there were punctuation glitches that felt "oh so good"

there were adverbial phrases tossed away like pillows

 

and through it all that complex sentence we are together

became a simple situation explained in an

essay of understanding...

 

we will always need each other.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/19/16

Reviews

[Michael Oliver]

I fond this work revolves around the double meaning of the words sentence
We are in thrall to the Muse but she does not care for so much of the time
Nice one -Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Michael...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

What a friend. Open discussion, honesty enveloping the air, I love the way you approached your muse, liking it to the soul's air.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al...

j.

[Nisreen]

I can't help but smile reading this

Well ..... you place the matter in quite a gentle manner

Nothing like having that one person that ignites life into our being :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Curiosity...

j.

[Sonia Walker]

We can't live without our muse. On occasion, we have to feed it chocolate to make it sweeter. I enjoyed reading your poem because of its humor.
~ Sonia

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we must feed it chocolate...mine likes Kit-Kats ---thank you, Sonia...
j.

[Matching Socks]

Lol. :). I love this. Oh the places we can go with this, but you kept it classy and I like that.
I'm glad no tears were spilled. A very loving poem...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana.

j.

[CD Campbell]

Cheeky. It can be uplifting to believe that writing may be the only true love. At least I think so. I like the last line. It's a hopeful statement. CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, CD...

j.

[gabrielle]

Poetry writing, i guess, is like being in a relationship/marriage. You need to have a lotsss of patience in dealing with the muse.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, lotsssss that is for sure...thank you, gabrielle...

j.

[V]

How can a relationship consisting of writing read so mature and sensual? I like the simile. Though the first lines were rather negative, it developed to a nice piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vanessa...

j.

[V]

Anytime.

[v_nashe]

The lack of punctuation adds to the piece whether it was unintentionaly done I don't know. But it give of a never ending vibe if that makes sense

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, v_nashe...

i only use punctuation in rare spots...let the reader make the breaks and infer meaning.

appreciate your visit..

j.

[dan]

A clever treatise on how poets need ideas and words while the words, in order to be relevant, need poets to arrange them in flourishes of thought and beauty. A poet's muse? Don't leave home without it.
Great piece jacob. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, dan...

j.