i'm just a Disney Cut-Out

i'm just a Disney Cut-Out

 

 

 

overwrought with contentment

your lips press against mine

in dreams where mediocrity meets beauty

 

and the beast purrs against the wind

echoes of thunderous tenderness

the clouds melt into tiny balls of cotton

 

and the soft lightning of love

strikes with impending doom

ecstatic doom,

delirious death,

 

 

wish it could strike twice

because being electrocuted by your touch

 

is such an exciting execution

to imagine,

 

in fact,

 

i am reading the menu

of possible last meals

 

just hoping your sky will meet mine

halfway...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/17/16

Reviews

[Anima Akuffo]

I love what your poetry does to my imagination. It paints a certain kind of picture - for this one a zapping kiss and certain death. In awe of the way you weave your metaphors. Great poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Anima...
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Original, sly, I can feel your body zapping in the air.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.
j.

[m.s.early]

This poem reminds me of jazz. It moves unexpectedly. Changes rhythm and context. Except sometimes jazz will leaving you hanging. They don't always resolve at the end if you know what I mean. You bring it back around nicely though.

Cheers

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, m.s.

j.

[aLittlePain]

A Disney Cut-out...I like this so much. A brilliantly clever bit of writing Jacob!
Love can make us feel like animated characters in a made up world constructed from very pretty lies.
"I am reading the menu...
Of possible last meals" these lines are genius!

Ngā mihi maioha
Rach x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Rach.

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Salivating diamonds as you would in good Disney write ... love this, Jacob. Really really really find writing. You may have guessed big fan of this piece.



There is a spacing incongruity ... intended?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much, Pryde, for your kind review...and yes, the space intended---want that last line before it to echo a bit before the next one...

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Gotcha ....:)

[Matching Socks]

A Disney cut out, I really like that.
I still photo that captures a lie in reality.
You are human, weak and vulnerable and need saving.
Let the damsel save the man... But no.
Woman wins again in the end,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, she does...most of the time...:)))

thank you,

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Read like that longing to reclaim that passion of being in love again which has dimmed over time. a splendid write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.

j.

[redzone]

first I liked your poem, it combines potential doom and death with lightning striking kisses and touching skies.. yep just like love really is...

but you know with that title you open yourself up to my sense of humor, you know this right!!?? so I must ask, which "cartoon character" Goofey, maybe Thumper' or is it one of the dwarfs?, like Sleepy, perhaps Jimmy Cricket, oh I know... it has to be Pooh Bear, cause Jacob you always get caught with your head in the honey jar... at least I didn't mention the Beast or Dumbo or "The Duck" as in Donald, since there is already a rather mindless Donald on the scene...

as usual, you write a serious and insightful poem about love and relationships and I with no literary imagination come along and tease... and to think I did this while you were enjoying your possible last meal... So Mickey, did you get your Minnie??? ;0)

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

one of the dwarfs...dopey i think....but maybe Dumbo...i'll identify with any of the weird, silly or stupid ones...:)))

the last meal was good, and you were proper entertainment with your sense of humor..

thank you for that, Curt...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

What I take from this is it is hard to feel that happiness is real if we have been unlucky in love, and therefore we feel fake -- a cartoon character waiting for the lightning he knows is going to strike but is powerless to stop.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sounds pretty close to me...yep, kind of that feeling...

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a clever clever boy you are... the title does well to hide the poems meaning until I realized how love can make us feel childlike and surreal.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh thank you so much for the "boy" reference...i need that these days...as i age...

appreciate your words, Dale.

j.