green mile

green mile

 

 

 

convictions,

not in the courtroom

but in the courting of the heart

 

suspenseful verdicts 

read by a jury of fears

love is either guilty or not

of treacherous play

 

but murdered emotions

get recompense in the end

 

convictions,

capital punishment, putting trust to death

she wonders why his face shows no emotions

as her heart is scathingly raped inside

 

she smiles through her tears

as her viability to move on

has its last meal,

 

and that long walk begins

down the aisle,

 

in the opposite direction

as her life is permanently altered...

 

a few buttons torn off,

affections disheveled

he didn't get as far as he wanted

 

but she will always feel the assault

each time her heart shies away.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/13/16

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Good drama. I could feel court room tensions, her fragile character limping around a vivid memory.

This is GOOD!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Al.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Again, an insightful view of the way relationships can change us -- leaving us tattered, and disheveled, and a little more leery every time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KL...

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Sadness expressed, but beautifully expressed. The comparisons are particularly nice. I like the intelligent use of "putting trust to death", "jury of fears" and other such ones. It is sorrowful that the things which make us glad have a sad ending- usually. Very deep and impressive. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Vatsal.

j.

[Nisreen]

I wonder what you mean by that last line .....
Its funny how a relationships happen in such an awkward sequence
You get so close to move away so far
Its mind boggling

I like the line of walking down the aisle in opposite directions .....

I still want to know what that last line meant ?!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and past relationships can make us shy away from future ones, without our even knowing we are doing that...
maybe she is feeling something she isn't even sure of what it is.

thank you for your words, Curiosity...

j.

[Nisreen]

May you are right .....

[Matching Socks]

Difficult for a heart to recover from such things...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana...

j.