Voice

Voice

 

 

you're my present tense, precisely

i am your past tense, predominately 

the future looks bleak, beckoning

 

mixing tense in a sentence

is a grammatical taboo

 

so goes my life with you.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/12/16

Reviews

[David Scott]

The twisting of our hearts... It does feel like a "mixing of tenses". Another great analogy!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, David...

j.

[Shannon]

Wow. At risk of sounding really pretentious, the meta aspects of this are powerful. A clever way to convey heart break, for sure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...
j.

[Nisreen]

I wonder
If that might be the mother
of all sources of miscommunication ....

Quite interesting !!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Curiosity.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

It looks like back to now or the present with all the beautiful sounds of loneliness, oneness and a solemn soliloquy of where do I go now.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good question...thank you for your visits and constant encouragement..Al

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is beautiful and quite unique. The intricate nature of relationship and love have been woven into finely crafted and tailored words which emerge straight from the heart. You have summarized the love-life of many through this piece. Excellent work. Keep writing, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...

glad you could relate somehow to my words,

j.

[Matching Socks]

Timing is everything I guess and this relationship is misaligned.
One tends to move on while the other stays - in love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

pretty certain to happen most times...thank you for your insight, Ana.

j.