at the Formal with Tired-Attire

at the Formal with Tired-Attire

 

 

ego's suit

the tie perfectly straight

pants creased with finest logic

shoes shine with a mind's brilliance

 

no scuffs,

not one wrinkle in the wisdom

affluent hair parted down the middle of IQ 

that reflects purpose combed through annals of alchemy

 

gold glittered words spoken from 

veins rich with a propensity for proper articulation

the clouds bow

 

he's a sharp dressed dancer of scholastic discipline

but realizes not,

that his wardrobe is so out of fashion

and his eyes give away a disheveled disdain

 

because his loneliness is a hat

that fits much too snugly on his swelled head.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/11/16

Reviews

[richieb]

When you are at this pathetic state the mirror in your mind can only see yourself. Great imagery to portray these self possessed maniacs. There are a couple of these cartoon characters I'd like to send this poem to.
Richie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i bet we all have those cartoon characters ....thank you for your words, richie.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

How many? The numbers boggle the mind. A whole society unto its self, dancing the Wall Street boogie, shifting their hot little roadster down the avenue of "look at me" I'm stupid and rich. Can we get a war going so I can make a killing!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh no kidding, Al...your words are so spot on--thank you,

j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I always love your work, you are a master at story telling. On a funny note when I opened this story an ad for men's attire ran at the top of the page.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i bet that vest is pretty cool....thank you for your kind comment....and the coincidence of the ad doesn't surprise me...i find myself constantly in Twilight Zone moments.

[Cherrie Palmer]

It went with my 79 cutlass fully loaded with a 8-track.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nothing like 8-Tracks...so reliable...and never ate the tapes...ha ha

[Cherrie Palmer]

No never, least that's how I remember it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I say wear it like you own it, I still have a burgundy vest from 1979

[Michael Oliver]

So sad - so sad to be out of time and think to be at the heart of it .
Recognize this - recognize a bit too much
Um yes -
Good observation Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words ,and for relating, Michael...
j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Egoistic people- full of ostentation- are of the opinion that by putting on smart apparel, using expensive accessories and speaking words crafted rigorously they will show how much they stand out- how very different they are from others. The first line- ego's suit- is simply impeccable and so is the rest of your poem. Lovely comparisons. Egoistic people always end up being criticized by everyone- their ego murders their self-respect and their true being. Beautifully penned. Keep writing, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Vatsal...

j.

[iand63]

Ouch! I guess a dick, however smartly dressed, will always be a dick (Checks mirror again to make sure mascara hasn't run) straight to the bone Mr J, excellent piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit, ian...
j.

[Nisreen]

I guess an ego goes about making everything look larger than it should be
Blowing normality to a state of exhaustion
I like how you use this physical appearance
and allude to attributes that are favorable in character

Moderation is key ..... And modesty is king

This write is pretty cool
Chapeau

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Curiosity...
j.

[Matching Socks]

The big ego with a swollen head. No one wants to be around someone like that...
Nice one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana...

j.