the cracks in morning

the cracks in morning

 

i surmise the sunrise

in your eyes is for me

then suddenly,

i am opening my umbrella lids

 

and your iris

is the antithesis 

of my deliriously drenched

dream.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/7/16

Reviews

[iand63]

See I find this interesting as an inter-relational and intra-relational poem . It could easily be about our waking realistion of our own reality, and the waking realisation of our relational realities. Nice one Mr J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, kind sir, for your insights....

j.

[redzone]

there is definitely too much rain going on lately and in our lives... like that "umbrella lids" both unique as well as accurate.. kinda reminds me of the Smoky R song, "The Tracks of My Tears"... hmmm why do many of your poems remind me of those old tunes??? lol

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

guess it is because i am from that era...and i have that music in me...:))))

thank you for your kind words, Curt.

j.

[m.s.early]

You have to one of the most effective writers on here. I call it "word efficiency", the fewer words you can use to effective express yourself.

Brilliant, and heart breaking.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, m.s.

j.

[Shannon]

Not very often that a piece with so few words can contain so much imagery, emotion and clever word choices. Despite the disillusionment, it resonates!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, S.

j.