the cracks in morning

the cracks in morning

 

i surmise the sunrise

in your eyes is for me

then suddenly,

i am opening my umbrella lids

 

and your iris

is the antithesis 

of my deliriously drenched

dream.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/7/16

Reviews

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Waking from a dream, of a magnificent beauty, alas, now unseen......

Sometimes there is nothing more heartbreaking than to dream of a beautiful love while asleep, only to open our eyes as the sunlight peers through the cracks in our lids, and dissolves our dream into fragments.

Well worded, well written and full of lovely images.
Great writing as always, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Doodley...

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob, "perchance to dream... aww there's the rub..."
You and Shakespeare are dreamers... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for that...he is a favorite of mine...and to be spoken of in the same sentence...wow...appreciate your words..Pat

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Best you stay in bed a little longer, maybe rub the eyes one or two times, who knows, a dream may pass by and you may find wholeness in the morning glow.

Nice write Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al...perhaps i best do that...:)))

j.

[...]

I love the title...the whole poem. I'm gonna send you some Visine and some Unisom so you can stay moist and dreamy :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

okay, i will look for them....UPS or regular mail?

thank you, lynn....

j.

[dan]

The awakening from a dream of love leaves a warming glow. The focus is on the eyes, the essence of observance, the truth tellers. The belief in what you see can incorporate remnants of dreams, footprints in the morning dewy grass.
A wonderfully dreamy write jacob. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, dan.

j.

[Nisreen]

Nothing more beautiful that being in this perfect dream
I must say the imagery here is breathtaking :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Curiosity...

j.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Things aren't always what they seem.
When you open your eyes,
you realize,
with a surprise
that its not what you surmise.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Shabeeh.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

A clever entertaining write Jacob. Be it tunnel vision, bad light or love is blind, or beauty lies in the eye of the beholder and just like that song mentioned I can see clearly now the rain has gone!! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"i can see all obstacles disappear" yep---so true.

thank you, Andrew...

read more"i can see all obstacles disappear" yep---so true.

thank you, Andrew...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

We see what we want to see sometimes, and then sometimes, we suddenly don't.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your visit, KL...

j.

[Matching Socks]

I like this. Makes me think of those times we shelter ourselves from truly seeing things because we've got blinders on. But when we do open our eyes there's clarity. We should all eat more carrots.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, carrots are supposed to help the eyes...i just had some in my pot roast...wow, i can see clearly now...thank you, Ana.

j.

[Matching Socks]

Lol! :)
...the rain is gone...
Hide the umbrellas.