bail denied

bail denied 

lying in the morgue,

my poem pronounced dead on arrival

death by pen

the author arrested for vagrancy

and attempted wit, withheld now for evidence

the detectives read between the lines for clues

the poet sitting behind bars of blue

colors of a mind processing sentence

thematically visited by his muse

she procures a defense for his release

an insane rain of inspiration

or maybe just a pick

for the lock in his brain


erin-cilberto
5/2/16

Reviews

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Wonderfully pieced together like the feeling im playing Of Rip Kirby to try to solve the maze..
Thematic i like the word..
vagrancy too

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,

j.

[barleygirl]

Such an imaginative series of word-plays drawing a parallel between (your favorite topic) writing & run-ins with the law. Sometimes we can be so free in our expressions, some might want to lock up us becuz of our revelations . . . my fave: "an insane rain of inspiration"! *smile*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl.

j.

[Jon Roggie]

I need the muse to get me out of my cell. Nice one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jon...

j.

[Jon Roggie]

My pleasure

[Bubo]

Just love this - different and fun to read - a breath of fresh air!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bubo...
j.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Beautifully expressed. Very abstract in meaning. Every one will have their own interpretation.
Love the words, "poem pronounced dead on arrival" and "death by pen".
If people were to have their way many writers would be behind bars for speaking out their minds.
And "detectives read between lines for clues"
Will need to be read many times to really sink in.
You are a master the way you weave words.

*shabeeh*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind with your words, Shabeeh...

thank you,
j.

[Bacchus]

DOA- never on your page-
i love this one... we all need to keep it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Bacchus.

j.

[Cassie]

I have missed reading you, sometimes when we speak our minds we can end up imprisoned either by people around us, judging us or avoiding us but the good thing with poetry is that a poet can express anything using their pen and ofcos some will not decipher the metorphor and you will be safe from imprisonment.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah, safe...thank you for your words, Cassie.

j.

[GreenShoes]

Another clever piece from the mind of erin-cilberto! :) Your poems are inspirational. Next time I sit down to write, I'm going to channel you. :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind in your comment, Karen...
thank you,

j.

[redzone]

that's it Jacob, now you done gone and done it, made me laugh... lock him up, throw away the key, off with his pen!!!! and to this "muse", HA there is no defense, nope none... humor is indefensable period!!! it gives people side stitches, bad backs from rolling on the floor laughing (rofl) and in general is just not heathly...

but besides all this, it is a great poem Jacob as only you could write a poem "dead on arrival", which I think impossible anyway!!! so you're pleading "insane rain" on this one huh... I would have just pleaded insane, but I am only the reader sitting in sunshine what would I know.. ;0)

Jacob if they ever even think of locking up your wit and vagrant pen, I will personally come and organize a posse to break you out...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the posse, my friend...

but make it soon before they hang me. :))))

[redzone]

we're on our way as I type... hang on Jacob.. er.. ooops... I mean...

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

A pretty interesting tale there. Beautifully written. A nice, fresh theme. A person put behind the bars for putting his opinion forward. And, then begins the procedure described in a lovely manner. Sometimes, what we speak can cost us a lot. Here, in India, we have numerous people who give controversial remarks, speeches and such stuff. I think this situation prevails around the world- but here it is too much. Coming back to your work, sometimes, even speaking the right thing against the wrong people- the bad ones, the powerful ones- costs a lot. Well-written, Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your take on this, Vatsal...
thank you for sharing your story...it is really sad that that happens...

j.