being used by the muse

being used by the muse

fraudulent words,

metaphoric mountains are just mirages

my heart travels flat ground

small signature knolls

here and there, 

talent spread over multiple miles 

stanzas stretching far and wide

but is the picture really real?

or a subconscious con

he thinks he writes truth,

but what expands his wastelands of wit

are just mists of missed opportunities

to unveil his soul,

and let the fog rise in filaments

capable of leaving deep impressions

like heavy dewdrops upon inky grass

shimmering in a reader's eye.

erin-cilberto

4/25/16

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

I think we fail when we do not take better care of choosing our muses... In so far as we can choose I guess.

"Don't go chasing waterfalls, stick to the rivers and lakes that you're used to" those I believe are TLC lyrics.

Some get caught up in wanting to write something big, grand and meaningful but the muse taunts them because they don't know enough about her/it to possibly understand and speak the truth.

My two cents. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think what you said is worth way more than two cents---thank you for your insightful words, Ana.read morei think what you said is worth way more than two cents---thank you for your insightful words, Ana.

j.

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :)

[aLittlePain]

We are but mere pawns to the muse...surely this must be every writers burden.

I for one am well acquainted with the feeling.
'Wastelands of wit' what powerful words.
Bravo Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review,

j.

[Nisreen]

i guess words are transparent
they reveal a person's soul
so fast

so fake emotion is just as powerful as real emotion

they both stand out
saying to the world

something or another ......

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Nisreen...

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Leaving impressions like dew drops upon grass...
gently in the morning light... your muse is a
butterfly in flight... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and you are very kind with your comments, Pat.
thank you,

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"Wastelands of wit", "metaphoric mountains are just mirages"....fantastic alliterative phrases! The muse is not an easy taskmaster. He/she sends us inspiration and where we go with it, well, it is unpredictable. Still, the words you write are always very worthwhile....and when the fog clears, you should be able to realize that. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi...
j.

[barleygirl]

Here you have described one writer's life using some of the most effective & imaginative word crafting ever! We all feel like frauds becuz every story has so many sides, it's impossible to do anything justice in words. We can only tell the slice of life that we're able to see at any given time. As always, stand-out alliteration & interesting play on words: "mists of missed opportunities" . . . & the second line is pretty mind-blowing in creativity & truth. This is one of my favorites of yours that I've read so far.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, thank you for your very kind words, barleygirl...

j.

[iand63]

In poetry it can become tempting to paint our reality with the sometimes potent colours of fantasy. Let's face it as poets we all have an ego that we either serve as a ceaser at a feast or we corall as a wild bull that feels unbreakable. I was thinking as i read that given another world that could be me being seduced by my muse. Powerful one Mr J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your response better than the poem itself, thank you for sharing your insights, ian.
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You write words in which to delve!
"shimmering in a reader's eye," love this line.
Tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and thank you for your kind review, Cyprian...
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

My pleasure!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Even our memories, with time, can fool us. We write because we have to...make some kind of sense of it, or just empty a lingering thought, or pain, even confusion out. If just someone relates and feels somehow inspired, understood, or not so alone then perhaps it is worth it. I'm reminded of the question "What is truth?" is it in the feeling a piece expresses or the exact situation described... I sense a ramble of mine coming on with no compass. Many thoughts about this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, because we have to---so true...
thank you for relating so well to this, Claire.

j.

[Bacchus]

right- we write these mountains of emotions-
and then look back- like were they ever there- is everything I've ever felt/done just flat?

are we the real deal?
what we've said, what we've done?

left naked... in front of everyone
occurring every morning that we write with this inky dew...
are we sustaining nature- or just a swift random sparkle

well, well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Bacchus..

j.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Beautifully expressed review, my friend!

[Ed Hart]

here you are, talking about me again; but i don't mind, i get a few quarters in my cup (thanks for the reminder jacob)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words and relating to my craziness, Ed.

j.