virtue's incontinence

virtue's incontinence

 

 

glowworms,

and silent moons

 

lovers among the tulips

softly moving in sync with the night

 

the buds open themselves to the touch

the joy slowly ambles

increments of sensual movement

 

when the day dawns

the lovers are gone

 

but the dew on the flowers

has a melting scent

the aftertaste

kissing white lavender skies

 

in darkly exotic collusion

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/23/16

Reviews

[Lorraine Montez]

Mmm, feels like Spring! Can hear the crickets...and feel the increments. "Exotic collusion" is a wonderful phrase. ... Maybe the title that describes the lovers' next liaison among the summer lilies?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Rain.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

such clever description in this piece. lovely.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...

j.

[Shannon]

This brings me back to that first time you realize that words can very, very sensual and suggestive without being crude or dirty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, S.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! "...exotic collusion" ..love it! well done ...reading touched my senses and i kid you not ..i could feel the pulse of the forest and moon making love with lovers of all kinds... can not say i like the title ...incontinence is a stretch to relate to this rich mood set by your poem ... but dew as the incontinence of Nature is such an original thought ... wrapping it up in "darkly" ..makes the experience almost sacred ..something to be kept and held close ... not dissected as i am doing now ;} great engaging poem ...not liking the title so much
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your honest and kind review, E.----when we have no control of our feelings, they just happen...thus the incontinence...but i was sure there would be readers who were jarred by it...
kind of expected that...thank you for your words...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..it is a bit jarring ... i agree that feelings sometimes go out of control and spilling them on innocent "victims" is an incontinence ... its the "virtue" part that stymies me ..but i am old and stuck in a mindset of sorts :} so much has been written discussing what the hell it even is :)
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, the morning after the night before. The touches, tastes, and sounds remain....so sensual. I liked the metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.

j.

[barleygirl]

You're tugging on some of my long-held memories of middle-of-the-night romps under the full moon (which is right now lighting up the wilderness all around). I especially love the 5th stanza (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your sharing how you relate, and i appreciate your kind words, my friend.
j.

[V]

I like the images you created much. Very descriptive, picturesque and vivid writing. Your lines read smooth, lovely yet with a sense of darkness and sensuality.

Though I have to admit your title made me smirk ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i figured i would get some smirks on the title...but it fit best with the sentiment---we lose control...often enough, when it comes to love...

thank you, Vanessa.

j.

[V]

That's true. ;) You're welcome.

[andrew mitchell]

you captured nature at its best jacob in the style of living with neighbours and the compatibility

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Icky love seeping into the night's atmosphere. I wanted to be there it sounded inviting.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your comment, Al...

hope you are well...

j.

[iand63]

Laconic and beautiful as is the flowering buds. Nice one Mr J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, ian.
j.