the proximity of professions

the proximity of professions

 

 

lawns freshly cut

the scent adorns a suburban morning

hedge rows neatly fringe alike houses

 

shutters all painted green

so serene, 

so the same

 

give me the complexity of a chaotic yard

rusty swing set

bald tires by the wading pool

 

fifty shades of lime lawn

sour shutters of different colors

stalled car in the driveway, smoking

 

sandal shone neighbor screaming at his kids

as to who let the dog do his business

on the dilapidated porch

 

frayed patio chair sinking with his weight---

as two blocks away, 

a suit starts his Mercedes

 

and takes a puff on his electronic cigarette 

tucks his speed under his seat

and flies to work...

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/17/16

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Ah! A very nice and engaging descriptive poem. The first stanza made me recollect about the dulcet fragrance of freshly cut lawns. Then your descriptions of what is afoot around you moved me. A neighbour of yours screaming at his kids as to who let the dog do his business on the dilapidated porch. And the description of a man who has put a suit on and who starts his car and flies to work is pretty engaging. These are the things that occur around us all, but few- like you- can put them on paper in such a beautiful way.
Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Vatsal.

j.

[iand63]

Another Pleasent Valley Sunday he ey

We restrict to control
The chaos of nature
We couture to disguise
Our savage descent

Another insightful write Mr J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, ian.

j.

[Nisreen]

The neighborhood of so many different people
leading a way on their own

yet for a person who walks by
they often are too close in distance

but so far in the way they live ...........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and many don't realize how close they are to each other---one block or two can be covered in a quick downfall, or a big windfall...

thank you for your words, Nisreen.

j.