Flunking Upper Class

Flunking Upper Class

 

 

musk, in a silent corner

of a busy gathering

the only scent of loneliness

as the olives fly

in a martini-ed room

 

maraschino cherry divers

off cliffs of drunk narratives

fall to the bottom of the glass lives

through which we look at them,

social impulse, heart beats quietly

 

someone doesn't fit in

doesn't sit in,

wallet's full, but the soul is empty

this life?

this life

 

this idle life, on easy street

feels as awkward as his mute retorts

to sordid conversation that finds him digging his keys

from his irrelevant pocket...

 

and soon, one less car in a half-mile driveway disappears

as the smoke and noise behind him

fades with a night he would rather not face again

 

this life? 

this life

 

this idle life, not for him

his soul needs the sustenance

of real.

and a Pepsi will do just fine

to quench his thirst

as he loosens his tie

just one last time.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/17/16

Reviews

[aLittlePain]

Insightful and thoughtful words
Wallets full, but the soul is empty' I love this line!

A great read, thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, aLittlePain.

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Well, money is the root of all evil- that is my point if view. Money doesn't assure you contentment. "Wallet's full, but the soul is empty" Really, good lines there. An empty soul, an avaricious and mean soul which runs after opulence- which keeps on desiring some thing or the other- can never be happy, no matter how heavy one's pocket is.
Beautifully written. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vatsal...

j.

[Matching Socks]

This is something I can very easily relate to I guess. In a way.
I think no matter how much money you have, if you didn't come from it, you'll never feel like that life belongs to you. You'll always feel yourself with torn jeans and a Pepsi. Or a Coke. So don't go chasing after expensive things in search of happiness.

People actually drink Pepsi??? :)

I really liked this one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ana.

j.

[Ruth]

You have such a way of capturing the moment Jacob...money is nothing if the soul is empty...reminds me of the saying that if all someone has is money, they are poor...astringent piece and felt...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Poppy,

j.

[Zugzwang]

I related to this depiction of the shallowness and vapid nature of a certain type of person. Too often people place a value on what is termed 'success', but is really just the acquisition of status, money and material goods. Since when did this become the most important thing in life? For some, like you Jacob, the life of the soul is the most important thing. Thank you for saying it so eloquently.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Z...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"Wallet's full, but the soul is empty!" YES YES YES.....this is right up my alley. Give m a Diet Pepsi. No martinis for me. Again, the rat race. Seems like you are on a tangent here....and I am enjoying it. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lydi...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

You go around the corners of life, plans firmly rooted into your mind, beauty, meaning fade further from the receptacle of your soul. One day, maybe just before dying, the mind lights up, the jaw drops as OMG screams from the soul.

Great write Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think i like your response better than the poem, Al...
thank you for your insights...
j.

[V]

Money doesn't buy happiness. It helps to solve a lot of problems and live a worriless life packed with material joys but that's it, the soul stays empty and lonely if one doesn't find anything to fill it. You depicted it pretty nicely by alternating between tasty and thoughtful words. I like the repetition: this idle life. Reads well to me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vanessa...

j.

[Ayvid N]

A great comment on the pretentious, upper crust. Their ki d of life can be so pathetic and stifling to the free-spirited.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, DIVYA...

j.

[Ayvid N]

You are most welcome Jacob...

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I like this guy :))))

I see you're serving your uniquely usual Jacob flare

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn.

j.