love lies, waiting

love lies, waiting

 

 

the rose seems simple

more than adequate beauty---

yet thorns lurk beneath

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/12/16

Reviews

[Bacchus]

eh- not my favorite.
too short- simple- and done...
your better than this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your honesty...obviously you are not a fan of senryu...

j.

[Bacchus]

I do like them... maybe just not roses much :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

gotcha :)

but i am glad of your honesty, because if you tell me you like a write, i certainly can believe it...
thanks again---have a great day, my friend.

[Bacchus]

you two- roses are good- if they are yellow- red- just nauseating... white are good too- lol
maybe yours is a different color all together.

[AYVID N]

Somehow, beauty complicates things...Its never so simple. Such a deep and powerful write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, DIVYA...
j.

[AYVID N]

It is a pleasure...

[mou]

True, rose has thorn but though it is touched by a soft palm and may be smell ,beauty or purity of its make us force to do.An infinite wait sometime seems to be held than to have a sure negative sign.
It is beautiful .Your writing has an amazing power to flaunt the thought.
Thanks for sharing .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, mou....

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Ah! Sir, beautifully composed and well written. Comparing love to a rose, which appears very beautiful, however, rests on prickly thorns. You have described what love is in just three lines with an excellent comparison. The path of love- appears simple, but isn't so by any means.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vatsal...

j.

[James]

A lot going on in this short little poem. Be warned it's going to hurt. Love isn't easy, it takes work and no one comes away without getting stabbed by the sharp thorns.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, so true, James.

thank you,

j.

[Country boy183798]

The thorns are part of its beauty? Or are they hiding behind it? Or perhaps, to appreciate beautify, one must learn to accept the thorns as a part of it?
I really liked it, it's short but it says a lot.
Keep on writing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe a little of both, no?
thank you for your words, Ed.

j.

[Country boy183798]

Thank you for sharing this poem. :)

[Karen]

They say (the infamous "they") that there is nothing worth loving that does not also merit some form of pain or struggle. I wonder whether the rose would lose its beauty if it also lost its thorns...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, "they"---:)

it's a good question you ask...i wonder if it would?
thank you for your review, Karen.
j.