love lies, waiting

love lies, waiting

 

 

the rose seems simple

more than adequate beauty---

yet thorns lurk beneath

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/12/16

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

OUCH....................

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.

:)))

[Nick Dahlburg]

Simple and insightful. Nice.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Nick.

j.

[aLittlePain]

Simplicity is truth! Totally charming

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, aLittlePain,

j.

[forgotten_ghosts]

Very simple and very nice! I really like this one. Thank you for sharing this poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, forgotten!

[Inject Positivity]

Yes it is, love feels beautiful and charming just like a rose but as we go in depth of it and in the hidden places of it, there hides sharp thorns, your title of the poem speaks so much in depth meaning just like the poem... This is a lovely senryu....

Sincerely
Dhiman

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Dhiman..

j.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Ah, but then a rose wouldn't be a rose without them...always the dilemma. To risk or not. Much in a few lines.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Claire.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

beautiful play on words, and very subtle allusion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL..

j.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Elegantly expressed. There is almost always pain associated with beauty :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Shabeeh...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Indeed, what looks beautiful can be hiding evil. You are fast becoming the master of the senyru! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Perhaps the thorns were meant to persuade us from picking it. I've often wondered why something so beautiful had such a guise for pain.

I love when you write these forms, Jacob. I find them quite addictive!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Kelly.

j.