Occasional Bells

Occasional Bells

 

 

1972, with you and bells,

not wedding, the blue jean kind

i liked you in them and out of them

just as well,

 

the roots of you showed, broken home,

on your own, too grown

too fast

blond dye, in studious increments

backpack of academic prowess,

i followed you to class

sat behind your wisps of secret thoughts,

whistling to myself some old 60's song

i can barely remember now.

 

but you looked straight ahead,

to and through our future,

while i was left with an old pair of denims

and an empty backpack,

 

looking at wedding pictures

wondering if you really ever happened...

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/9/16

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Some people just hit you in the just-so spot, don't they. Lovely work, Jacob:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pryde...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

This works on multiple levels -- an almost was, a could have been, a was but then wasn't.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your thoughtful comment, KL..
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Your wisps of secret thoughts, great line. I found the melancholy beautiful. Nostalgia happens to be an old friend of mine. He came along while I read your poem.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Al...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Bought another one of your books. Can't wait!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really? wow, thanks my friend...which one did you order this time?

[Alfred Kukitz]

Was it something with Waltz in the title? I can't recall.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah, Abstract Waltz....thank you, so much...hope you enjoy....

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I read three finding myself blown away by the power of your words. What a death! Regards, al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you my friend.

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes, we are left with emptiness... the sweet kisses
of memories... fallen stars and old cars.
Love stored in broken dreams and poetry.
truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pat.

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob, your poem is awesome...
left with old denims and an empty backpack...
your poem encompasses possibly a third of your life.
truly, Pat

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Very well penned down and the emotions have been brought out alive in a sweet manner. Sir, you have described the happenings quite well- how you whistle an old song while the girl looks straight ahead- to and through your future. And, in the end, you flip through the pages of some wedding album and wonder whether she had ever happened. A nice read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Vatsal.

j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Your mind is so amazing! I always enjoy your viewpoint and how you choose to express it. Your poems are like two-way mirrors, looking in and out at the same time. Thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Linda Marie.

j.