a poet didn't write this

a poet didn't write this

 

 

 

i am going to un-write you,

even if i have to spell all the words backwards

this non-poem will defunct your spell on me

 

tears dot the i's

handkerchief hallucinations

of love,

extended rhyme with you

never had even similar sounds

 

wasn't slant rhyme

more like dead rhyme

free verse for you

a lonely sonnet for me,

badly written

 

i am going to un-write you,

watch my fingers move like lightning

there will be thunder in my theme

 

as i dream you, not awake

but away

with middle of the night blackening 

of the white sheets,

 

that no longer have purity in context

just a conjuring of text

to undo

you.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/8/16

Reviews

[Kirsty Woodward]

"I'm going to un write you". This line is everything. I'm truly in love with this piece. There's an essence in your work that I just adore.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Kirsty...
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh if only we could "un-write" some of the people and situations of our lives. If only we could have a do over and write life the way we hoped it would be. Why do we remember the good, the bad, the ugly in the middle of the night? I think it is an evil plot Morpheus hatched! I liked this one a lot, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Lydi...yes, that damn Morpheus...
j.

[LostBoy]

That's something. Nice write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks, River.

j.

[hcarson]

NICE, I particularly liked the lines 'with middle of the night blackening white sheets'..:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, h.

j.

[Caradoc]

Oh if only I could un-write certain people...

-Caradoc

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your comment, Caradoc...

j.

[Urja Gokani]

amazingly written
keep it up
:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you,
j.

[Urja Gokani]

welcome :)

[V]

Creative piece (though which piece of poetry isn't ^^). I particularly like the repetitions "i am going to un-write you" Reads almost like a word exorcism caused by pain, too much of it sealed in the words you chose to write down.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oooh i like your comment...better than the poem itself...the exorcism..i can see Father Merrin in my mind...

j.

[V]

Thanks and you're welcome.

[W.k.kortas]

There is a certain tongue-in-cheek nature to this, but it plays off (and serves as a nice balance to boot) the underlying seriousness of the piece. That only sounds easy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind comments, W.k

j.

[Country boy183798]

There are those stories that we wish we could unwrite. But they'll stay with us, forever as a part of us, as pieces of memories, playing their role in defining who we have become.
I absolutely love this poem. It's mesmerizing and beautiful, and one of those poems that I could read over and over again.
Thank you for sharing and keep on writing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review...

j.

[Matching Socks]

I feel this. I wish we could unwrite but then we'd be un-writing the lessons too. If I did un write my last relationship then I'd be unwriting my children too. I think maybe just throwing the inkwell on the page to drown the feelings is better in my case. But there are several I would definitely go back and delete!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing what you did...yes, you would not want to unwrite your children, that is for sure...

i appreciate your words, Ana.

j.