rural rest stop

rural rest stop

 

 

off road,

sentiments in gravel dust

a figment of my imagination

rests on a bed of recollection

 

he figures on a day

when he will cross deliberately

to her side,

 

but for now,

he pounds his pillow

with a feeble fist of frustration

knowing how close she is to him

 

and how far away he is

from her.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/3/16

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Yes so close physically but so distant emotionally and until they connect it really is isolation for one!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this. Wondering however, if you meant to switch from first to third person. I only say this because I accidentally do the same from time to time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...and yes that was intended...the speaker is referring to someone else with the "he"read morethank you, KL...and yes that was intended...the speaker is referring to someone else with the "he"

but thank you for that...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

perfect, -- that makes the meaning more clear for me. Sometimes I admit I am a little linear in my thinking.:)