the glare of fossils

the glare of fossils

 

 

i am bones in the sun

and you were the jackal

tearing off the skin of my existence

 

morsels for you, the heart of me

warped calcium accumulates

as time shines the stone

 

of disconnection

and i look at you now

with hard rock remembrance...

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/3/16

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Were you taking us back to poetic Neolithic man?

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting theory....thank you, sir.

j.

[W.k.kortas]

I find this a bit of a change-up for you; the wordplay which is your hallmark is here, certainly, but a bit more In the background, as the tone of this strikes me as a bit more abstracted and indirect, almost an impressionist feel, if that makes a damn bit of sense.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that makes perfect sense...and i appreciate your review, W.k.

thank you for your words.

j.

[...]

DAMN...that's a whole lot of passion, though it be angry passion, for a bunch of calcified bones :) I seriously doubt that any trouble in your relationships had anything to do with you not getting your point across...laughing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...yes, thank you for your words, lynn...
j.

[Crimson_ish]

Such a wild and violent imagery! the intensity of deception, pain, and end is wrapped in splendidly! love this one!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Crimson_ish...

j.

[Carolynn]

Fantastic imagery again - love the way you go from the raw pain of fleshy emotions to finding a way to harden yourself to feeling anything for the person any more. Sounds very bitter though, with the inability to forgive.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Carolynn,
j.

[Sheila Kline]

A relationship that is slowly dying seems at times to be creating that which is set in stone as the angst lingers on and on. When we realize the damage that is destroying us we are sometimes able to end it by walking away, and remembering it all with the hard rock, stone face stature that is needed to survive.
An interesting read, as always my friend!
p.s. Is the relationship now buried in "The Flintstone Cemetery" with Wilma and Fred? LOL

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, and your funny p.s. Sheila...i loved that show---Pebbles and Bam Bam....yes, it is buried there.

j.

[Sheila Kline]

I'm glad to hear it is buried there as Fred and Wilma, and Bam Bam must have needed some new stones placed there so we don't forget them. Oh, and let's not forget "Pebbles" too!

[highonwords]

abuse in a relationship - which sobers and hardens the lover from facing an almost 'extinction' of the heart - i devoured the poem with an intensity and enjoyed doing so

steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, steph...

j.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, my friend :)

steph

[Lyn Anderson]

Very intense and dramatic imagery -- Jackals, not unlike vultures, are somehow so cruel, at least when we think of them in a poem ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...appreciate your kind review.

j.