to whom it may concern

to whom it may concern

 

 

i have been the "Who"

too long, 

the subject doing the action

of giving love

for too many sentences

the "she" always the object of my affection

the "Who" finding his way through clauses

of caresses, causes of duress-es

the immovable pronoun

seeking identity within the opposite gender.

the meaning behind the semantics of giving serenity

while getting calamity

 

but now,

 

i want to be the "Whom"

the object of her prepositions,

the direct object of her transitive advances

even the indirect object of her sensual trances

 

i want to be the pronoun that floats

across her essay

swaying in her breeze

giving in totally to the feeling

enough to send me reeling

to the end of whatever phrase

she casts into the wind

to amaze

 

"Who am I?"

"Whom is me?"

 

when i am finally both,

then i will accept us

as we.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/1/16

Reviews

[Bacchus]

I really like the ending.. until this takes place you are not a we.
You need to learn how to play hard to get- and not gush all over the place-
at least in person. Might scare her off!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...yes, been a long long time since i gushed...life and love...it's just a poem, just an idea...my only gushing is in poems...:))

thank you for your words, Bacchus...

[Bacchus]

A fun piece of gushing. :)

[Adam Adams]

One of my fav. poetry. I'mma steal it! *wink*

very nice, heartfelt and deep. I kinda read it in a great musical flow - a rap flow (that's one of my fav. genres, by the way). Loved the mix. of "who" and "whom". Ah, so new and captivating. I kinda love reading such refreshing and so prime pieces especially if they just belong to old, vintage art.

"Damn man, you cook very yummy dishes,
dish-washer you become.
She's and will be in your nights
as long as you writing such pieces that have readers cum-med"

Cheers, buddy!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Adams...

j.

[Jon Roggie]

Time to change it up a bit. Switch to I, me, and some other self describing pronoun. It might be fun!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

might be, Jon....thank you,

j.

[Cryingkate]

Jacob..? come here..... I need to take your temperature.
I have peer- review -witnesses that you are showing signs of "writers fever"
Oh yes ! Just one read and I know you are hot !
Writers Fever can lead to serious Quillmess

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah you are too funny....thank you for your words, Connie...
j.

[Cryingkate]

:-)........

[...]

I love it, I love it, I love it! Did I say I love it? I meant, I LOVE it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, :))))))

[highonwords]

oh man - oh man - this is over wonderful - a very smart/clever write - i enjoyed every twist and turn of semantics woven into the poem - i am speechless - you've gotten so acquainted with the parts of speech - wish i could have written this :)

steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your really kind review, steph.

j.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, my friend :)

steph