those floating hearts

those floating hearts

unresolved fate,

you flow into the future

like a river with reckless abandon

wrecking all the toy boats in your path

a stream of covert consignment

your lovers paying the higher percentage

for you to sell them short

somewhere downstream there will be a dam

and your lack of conscience will burrow into it

the flow will fail,

and the ships will sink you to the bottom

of yourself.

erin-cilberto

3/27/16

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

something happens within the culture of love poetry writing. Let us call it inverse variation where
the product of two soles equal a constant. And it is way more culture than equation; far more
change and circumstance than static outcomes:

"somewhere downstream there will be a dam
and your lack of conscience will burrow into it
the flow will fail"

Or the consequences we've imagined will earnestly request from us an understanding or a non-understanding. I get it. Hearts do float because the heart, the metaphor not the organ,
holds all the authority and justification for feelings to occur. Great analogy my friend....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review and insights, my friend...

j.

[mou]

It is wonderful!
Thoughts are so deep and your words are more powerful to make it able to reach to the crevasse of the heart of readers.
Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, mou

j.

[Pax]

remembering a few lines of my writes as i read this:
Diving into your deepest thoughts is just like scuba diving without oxygen.
We need to learn how to hold our breaths, to accept everything
and process every obstacle in the depth of negativity.
For far beyond its deepness, there is light, shiny as pearls.
You’ll learn its wisdom, an insight that will guide you towards reaching any goal…

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really appreciate your keen insight into this read, Pax....thank you...

j.

[emmajoy]

'.. like a river with reckless abandon -- wrecking all the toy boats in your path .. '

Oh my, there's a cynicism in this i don't recognise as being yours! Not sure if you're referring to self or a nother or others. Which or whatever there's a stinging truth to your words, seen clearly if not unkindly. There are and always have been takers who silt up the flow; one can only hope that those ships of conscience and retribution will sink the culprits good and proper!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, emma...yes, takers...no conscience...i appreciate your visit...

j.

[emmajoy]

Yours words always beckon..

[Chris]

Sounds like a 2 - 3 A.M. moment captured...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris....appreciate your visit, and i hope you are well my poetic friend...

j.

[highonwords]

i love the third and fourth stanzas - sounds like a lover playing for a fool the love and hearts of others - and he will sink into the bottom of emptiness and no one will help him

nice write, my friend :)

best,
steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, steph...

j.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, my friend :)

best,
steph

[gabrielle]

This piece makes me thing of a man without a conscience. He'll do everything, even stepping the rights of others, so as to get what he wants. Lack of regards to the feelings of others may take a person somewhere but the same shall eventually also cause his downfall..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, gabrielle...
and yes...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yeow! i have been a committed reckless abandon guy from ohhhhhhhhhhhh 15 onward .. feeling a bit guilty :{
seriously now ... this is a bit different from your poetry i have read ... you don't usually list to ambiguous ... but i like it .. it happens to me all the time .. i start out with a very clear path only to end up asking myself what the hell i just said :) ... though the selfish taking antagonist is clearly displayed i am not sure who the hero or heroine is ..
your title sets me up for the killing strike ..damn! now i have to examine me conscience ... nice work sir! ;) thanks a lot! :))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, E.

j.

[paddy d daly]

Wreckless abandon may always catch
Up, But I can not judge.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, paddy...appreciate your visit...

j.

[Zugzwang]

I found this on to be enigmatic, but in a good way. Are you addressing someone else, or yourself here? I enjoyed the mystery of this and it really got me thinking. I love the image of an out of control river, and its destructive power. Very compelling.
z.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Z.

j.