partly cloudy with a chance of love

partly cloudy with a chance of love

 

 

 

a Frito's morning,

crisp air you can take bites of---

dip into the greening lawns

and blossoming pears

 

the sun bounces off car chrome

in dancing laughter

the shine inside is deep

as we inhale the scent of proclamation 

 

spring is on the table now

perfect white clouds to snack upon

like a ranch dressing in which to immerse smiles

if i partake too much of this glorious gala

 

it will leave me no room for summer's dinner

but then, we only live once

so , please pass the chips

and i will warm  to your soft cumulus.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/17/16

Reviews

[hcarson]

makes me look forward to the morning and standing on my balcony, sipping coffee before getting ready to leave...fantastic...loved the lines '' a frito'smorning,crisp air you can take bites of..''...what a brilliant way to sum up that sort of early morning spring srispness..thank you for sharing, wonderful read as always

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, h,

j.

[forgotten_ghosts]

A picture of a perfect day in spring came to my mind and also or therefore the fresh feeling you get when you fall in love, which makes you think that there are no limitations in life. My favorite verse is " it will leave no room for summer's dinner". This one made me really think.. I don't know how and why, but it kind of did..
Thank you for this great poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, forgotten----

j.

[Cory Barrett]

Always good to read your work.... and now I will have some chips

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, enjoy your chips...

j.

[Tomás Ó C..]

What better weather forecast can we ask for ?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Tomas...appreciate your visit...

j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You always write what I wish I had thought of! ...and how can you miss with a "Frito's morning"? Make mine chili cheese, please.

Perhaps this will entice my muse to dance. Awesome work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Kelly....

j.

[Carolynn]

I'm thrilled that Spring has arrived and I too have to be careful not to indulge too much because I always look forward to Summer's feast as well - this is all kinds of delicious :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Carolynn--

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Spring fever has arrived! What a lovely romantic write....it's always the right time for warming up to the soft cumulus of a lover! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi...
j.

[Gee]

Wouldn't want to bet on the spring lamb that gambols in the welcomed back sunshine making it through to summer.Just love this time of year,all new life bursting forth.What to say about your poem......splendid young Jacob,you're coming along nicely,God only knows how good you'll be in another twenty years time

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...and especially for the "young man" remark...in 20 years i will probably just be sitting in a stupor...

j.

[Zahra]

the sun bounces off car chrome
in dancing laughter
the shine inside is deep
as we inhale the scent of proclamation

Amazing lines. "the shine inside is deep." A great read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Zahra...

j.

[Nisreen]

i love your usage of chips to this sweet connection
saying hey i am going to have a good time
despite the high chances of rain

this piece has such a light feel to it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, RiverSided...

j.