Dining at the Ritz

Dining at the Ritz

 

 

a poor boy sandwich

crackers from the dumpster dive

with ketchup garnish

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/17/16

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Walk down any city street, and there is this diner. Seeing this vivid portrait, I have no complaints...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we are lucky to have what we have....thank you for your thoughts, Rita.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Crackers and ketchup....how sad that some eat that for dinner and think it is gourmet because that is all they can afford. Those dining at the Ritz would not give him a second glance and would think they are better than the dumpster diver. Interesting dichotomy here.....life is not always judged as it should be. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such insight you always bring in your responses...thank you, Lydi...you of the sharp eye for poetic interpretation.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

a brilliant play on words here -- emphasizes the disparity between the person doing the dining and the world in which he lives.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

outside the window of the ritzy restaurant, not so far away....

thank you, KL...
read moreoutside the window of the ritzy restaurant, not so far away....

thank you, KL...

j.

[Nisreen]

My heart is pulling apart

these words put so much into perspective

i always sit with these boys ..... they have so much pride
dinning at the Ritz applies so much in their decorum

humanity has imbalanced priorities
and i am definitely one to admit it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, imbalanced priorities...that is so true...

thank you for your words, RiverSided...

j.

[dan]

At first blush this may seem to some to be "cute..." But reality intrudes to drum home the point that this is how the less fortunate find subsistence. Well worded with a strong point. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, dan...appreciate your words, always.

j.

[Norman 223]

This really packed a hard punch, Jacob. Reminded me of an old song about "One Meat Ball" .
You said so much in twelve words that reflected the lives of countless down and outs.

Norman

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Norman.

j.

[1]

12 rapid heartbeats identifying with each powerful word in this piece.....................

Thanks for sharing, sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Reflection.

j.

[Érenn]

Damn this one hit me hard. If I am not wrong Ritz is one of the more well known hotel establishments in the States. Fact is poverty is something that is visible to me the moment I step outside my door. What flashes in front of me how the little children are scavenging though the dumps looking for tight packaged poly bag and then you have the dogs right behind them waiting for their chance to dine at this gourmet restaurant...... Well about the Senryu itself, good use of alliteration: Dumpster dive in the second line a it does a good job invoking imagery. ^^ Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Errenn....

j.

[highonwords]

poverty is a face i see everywhere, especially in third world countries - poverty is high in the philippines - the delight in this poem over simple joys makes me cringe for every time i acted spoiled and discontented over what i have - an eye-opener

steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that feeling, steph.

j.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, jacob

steph

[Carolynn]

And to think that's a gourmet meal to some :(

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, unfortunately...thank you, Carolynn....

j.