the violin playing in her eyes

the violin playing in her eyes

 

 

 

recluse spider bite

wound, similar to your love

deadly to the heart

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/13/16

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is especially impactful if you've ever seen the bite of a brown recluse, which leaves a lifelong crater after dead flesh is washed away. I've felt that crater feeling. This message is NOT understated!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, barleygirl...

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I could only wish that the violin played in the streams of my eyes, it was my arm for a few years:) Mmmm, seduction is my favorite breakfast! Into the library!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Queenie...

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Still an inspiring moment...

[Patricia Wedel]

Web of love captures
Once smitten and twice bitten
Tangled in romance

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the shy fly....

thanks for your poetic reply...

j.

[Carolynn]

ouch this one leaves a nasty bite :) love it! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carolynn....hope the bite doesn't leave a scar...

j.

[highonwords]

love is the web - the spider is the lover - one bite could leave you helpless, could push you on the edge of sanity - love could really be deadly to the heart and the psyche, nonetheless, we seem to look at love in the eyes, saying i would die for you, i could die for you

steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we seem more than willing to die for it...no doubt.

thank you, steph.
read moreyes, we seem more than willing to die for it...no doubt.

thank you, steph.

j.

[Érenn]

You know when I read this senryu the first question that struck me is why use spider bite? because it wasn't just for the sake of getting the exact syllable count. I was sure there were many ways you could have achieved that. So i read it a few times before I came to the conclusion that even before the bite happens one most probably will have to end up tangling in the web of the spider. i.e. love is the web that one gets tangled up in and once bitten even you only have eyes for the one who loves you and no others and it's deadly because now only her existence in your life matters, but if she leaves you then the heart shatters, thus the true use of the word bite here. But then again this is just what I felt when I read this one ^^ As usual enjoyed the reading your works. Thank you for sharing ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your insights on this one...interesting how you see "bite" use...always fun to see which way readers read a poem...

thank you, Errenn.

j.

[B. Boileau]

When two become recluse, bitten by love, all other life ceases to exist...

One of my favorites of yours.

b

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, bill.

j.

[Nisreen]

love love love

what can one say ......... it feels like music
feels like poison
and hanging on the edge of sanity

bravo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your words, RiverSided...

thank you for sharing your thoughts...