the violin playing in her eyes

the violin playing in her eyes

 

 

 

recluse spider bite

wound, similar to your love

deadly to the heart

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/13/16

Reviews

[1VJ]

Violins (their inescapable melancholic sound) and spiders in one toxic bite, interminably stinging. So succinct but packs a punch.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paloma...

j.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Exotic title: short and sweet verse!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tomas.

j.

[AK]

This is........ _______ Good. Hey can some people go look at my poem. Look up "Mommy" And the writer is me "AK"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, AK....

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Wow! Crimson_ish explanation is better than the poem!

Jacob you been outdone!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i've been outdone many times before, my friend :))))

j.

[Crimson_ish]

This is a really interesting analogy, pondering over it, it discloses a new sphere of love, it indeed hurts like a poisonous spider bite, toxic for years when it ruins you. Especially with your title, it's got this tinge of terror and melancholy at same time, with maddened violins playing in the background. It's a really interesting and refreshing read! Thank you for this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your really kind review and insights into the workings of this piece, Crimson_ish...read morethank you for your really kind review and insights into the workings of this piece, Crimson_ish...

j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Love is like a spider that bites the very sensitive part of us. When we are being abused, it is not love anymore...so it's time to walk away.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what you say is so true, Dhaye...thank you for your words,

j.

[Ayvid N]

Stunning, in a word. Not much else needs to be said.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, DIVYA....

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Sometimes the smallest group of words can be larger than life -- such is this, a poem, straight to the heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KL

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ouchy... I can feel the heart rotting away right now.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your reply, Dale....hope you are well...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

When love is fatal, it is not true love and certainly not worth it. I liked the title of this one. Some people are always complaining and make you think they are helpless....don't trust that violin. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, that violin..or ....well...thank you, lydi....appreciate your words...

j.