in the key of contentment

in the key of contentment

 

 

 

i may be the poet

but you're my instrumental lady

no words needed,

you are a combination of chords,

of melodious eccentricities 

and they all play in sync

to make me smile

 

i want to write you a song

but you tell me just to hold you

and sway to the beat

of our love,

 

now i pray the DJ

will re-spin the mood

at least one more time

 

so i can teach my steps

the memory

and feel your movement

 

without hearing a sound.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/12/16

Reviews

[Linda alexander]

The relation between spirit of poetry and the poet comes synchronized music and dance generates in poets and readers, great metaphor, liked it

[Cryingkate]

oooh... I like that take.... I didn't see it with that perspective.. ooh... I like it better then my first impression....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Linda...i like your take also...
j.

[Cryingkate]

Jacob I enjoyed the dance here with you. Feeling the music of the heart.
I enjoyed it as a two heart step Half is the Lyrics and half the melody.

One little thing though.. For the way i read it, the last line seems not to fit... for surely I heard the song as I danced it. I might suggest trading the word audible instead of hearing..
But .... that might change it too much seeing you craftfully weaved in the 3rd line No words needed.

Perhaps I shouldn't make any suggestion and enjoy it as it is. I couldn't give my first impression on this if I didn't explain my experience. And that experience drew an argument with the last line. Because I heard every beat and felt the dance :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i am glad you said what you feel...and how you experienced it...thank you for your words and the suggestion, Connie..

it is more like with a poem...hearing it isn't important...it's feeling it...but that is just how the words kind of came about...



j.

[Cryingkate]

Your a Good Dancer Jacob.. I Thank you :-)