in the key of contentment

in the key of contentment

 

 

 

i may be the poet

but you're my instrumental lady

no words needed,

you are a combination of chords,

of melodious eccentricities 

and they all play in sync

to make me smile

 

i want to write you a song

but you tell me just to hold you

and sway to the beat

of our love,

 

now i pray the DJ

will re-spin the mood

at least one more time

 

so i can teach my steps

the memory

and feel your movement

 

without hearing a sound.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/12/16

Reviews

[The Inner Me]

you are a combination of chords,
of melodious eccentricities
and they all play in sync
to make me smile

Great lines. Great work. Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Inner Me.

j.

[alifeacoustic]

Exceptional write Jacob. The feeling and senses the muse dictates within us are as individual and distinctive for each and every one of us. I think you capture perfectly the sensations created when you find that creative instinct kicking in and taking over the pen. Some beautifully creative lines here, "you are a combination of chords, of melodious eccentricities" sums up that sensation perfectly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, alife.

j.

[Cassie]

This is a good one as always Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie...

j.

[Nisreen]

I guess when the match is right
you feel nothing but gratitude
and complete serenity

like this beautiful piece

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, RiverSided,

j.

[barleygirl]

LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! This is a very sweet little ditty that could apply to a beloved person, or to one's writing muse, or to any number of magical influences in life. I love the way you use words: "melodious eccentricities" and alliteration: "combination of chords" . . . I love the ephemeral way this message floats around before totally grasping my mind with a specific meaning.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, barleygirl---

j.

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I can feel the movement of this poem without hearing a sound...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, i am glad you could, lynn....

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Someone has hit just the right chord in life and with the pen. Wonderful work, Jacob:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pryde...
j.

[highonwords]

bravo, jacob - one of your best poems - there is harmony that runs throughout the poem about two lovers. not just in love, but totally contented and committed to each other, your poetic gift shines thruout the lines

my best,
steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, steph.

j.

[KWP]

you always show a cheeky and yet humorous side to your words, reflect on yourself I am sure ;) one can only read you with a smile ... X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, glad this could give you a smile...

j.

[poet_feefee]

my goodness. I fell in love with this. I was swaying to the beat. I want to re-spin the mood as well, many times.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, feefee...

j.