need more napkins

need more napkins

 

 

Cinnamon catharsis 

sweet dresses sway in toasted breeze

a warm summer's morning

breakfast in bed,

images of clarity in an Argus viewer,

behind you the most azure sky

and you the most alluring condiment

 

in a field of willowy grain

i am running through wheat colored snapshots

buttery interludes of melting confection

 

but alas,

 

pestilent dreams shadow me

the viewer darkens

dead voltage, the breeze shorts out

 

i still try to imagine the taste of Cinnamon conception

but the breeze becomes an inert fantasy

 

and now too much light

filters through my Kodachrome disquiet 

and spills the  milk on my 

tenuous tray.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/12/16

Reviews

[.]

At first i thought this was a daydream longing for a lost confection! Haha

However after a second reading, i understand it much better and appreciate it more for its true worth.
I enjoy your use of words all the time, Jacob. Always very carefully selected and perfect for the write.
To view a moment of one's life through a mental lense is a very profound and emotional moment for us. It only helps to keep those old longing memories alive but reopens all the old wounds at the same time.

As Always, a peerless piece of writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so grateful for your kind review, Doodley...you gave me a breakfast of encouragement this morning...

j.

[highonwords]

what a sumptuous treat this is, jacob - everything flows like honey on a stack of pancake words - a wonderful day gone awry, gone bleak, everything spoiled in the end , because of 'pestilent dreams' - fear and uncertainty that overwhelm the lover

my best,
steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, steph.

j.

[...]

A truly brilliant way of expressing the mental vacation to better days of warmth amidst a colder black and white reality. Amazing metaphorical daydream, Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, lynn.

j.

[KWP]

oh should have stopped a while longer at the melting confection ... just you know lingered a bit, waited for a different reality to pop into view once more ...

it's a real bugger when you want desperately for something to continue but - jeezaloo - as much as you push for it, it just don't happen ....

Love X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful reply, KWP---appreciate your visits.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

For me this is a vivid dream of an old man in a hospital bed. But maybe I am just imagining that. Anyhow, I really love the image of the buttery confection -- very sumptuous indeed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, yes, i can see that now...i love the angles from which you approach poetry...i see that in many of reviews...not just the ones on my work....appreciate this.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem, I really enjoy your work.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I want to say you dipped your toast in the milk but it fell into the milk before it reached your mouth.

The style of this poem knocked me off my poetic feet. I'm reading in disbelief at the composition. Unusual, thought provoking, simply great writing.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the extremely kind review, Al....

j.

[Érenn]

This was an interesting read, for me not one of your easiest writes to comprehend but this was fun for me nonetheless. Before i go into the interpretation part, i first wanted to commend you on the imagery you have invoked here. Superb. Affects not only your eyes and nose but even the tummy (This read made me hungry). Now what I ended up interpreting is the love between the two people here is quite enjoyable and feels like a dream of sorts very serene very enjoyable. Breakfast in bed together quite the treat. Then spending times together sharing those intimate moments creating memories (me thinks snapshots here are memories) But then it's those insecurities that suddenly wrap around one's minds and then what was never like a dream suddenly seems like fantasy not something that would last forever. The analogy of tenuous tray here for me is the heart that is weak and will not be able bear if something would happen to this relation thus the need for more napkins to dry out the tears. Also there's the feeling of the sudden jolt of coming back to reality after some time had passed thinking over the insecurities. I like it much ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an in-depth and insightful review of this poem..and i thank you so much for your words, Errenn...

j.