when you can't say no

when you can't say no

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto
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inspired by barleygirl's "just say no" but in a bit of a different direction....

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when you can't say no



your skin as white 
as a pure line of cocaine
and the effect as enchanting

your eyes are pools of LSD
i want to trip into the enlightenment
and carry your flowers in my mind

a meth methodical breakdown of will
i am hooked on the deluge,
the flood of commitment i cannot still

rehab might be the only solution
but i am in constant confusion
because you are my prescription

and my heart says i can't quit you
though my reason, is needling me
to get clean.




erin-cilberto
3/12/16

© 2016 jacob erin-cilberto


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everything here is perfect - your poetry is addictive - a love, more like an affair, that turns your world upside down, with the power to obliterate your senses and reason - a love that is against your better judgment, and yet you succumb to its spell - it'll take some length of time, for you to regain your senses, that is if you don't find yourself, hanging from the a certain height of emotional unraveling, great writing, jacob

my best to you,
steph

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, steph...
j.
Wow. I love your use of words. This is really great and shows the disjoint of heart and head.
What a difficult thing relationships can be.
Thanks for this excellent poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your words, maricoona...

j.
high on the love drug, can't come clean without rehab, loved it J.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, Corset...

j.
Love is the drug and I need some more..... comes forth in this write Jacob with Brian Ferry supplying the music!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you, andrew.

j.
It's like a death sentence when we try to quit something we are so passionate about. Brilliant reference , jacob.

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your words, gabrielle.
j.
I guess the heart wants what it wants

no one would be ever so cruel as to destroy anything beautiful

and the heart speaks in words of beauty


Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

thank you for your words, RiverSided...

j.
I knew you couldn't do it! Lol lol ahhh the flame of addiction....we are all such addicts aren't we! (Insert giggle)😉

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

yes, we are...thank you, Queenie...

j.
They say love cures all ills and certainly it is addicting! Difficult to turn away from it when it is standing in front of you. The metaphor is splendid here...and you followed it through every stanza. Of course, now I will be singing the rest of the day, "I was feelin' so bad, asked my family doctor just what I had, I said, "Doctor, Mr. M.D., can you tell me, what's ailin' me?" It's all your fault! LOL Lydi**

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

and he said "yeah yeah yeah , Good lovin""

thank you for your kind review...and bring.. read more
Lydia Shutter

8 Years Ago

I knew you would know! :)
I always knew you had a poetry addiction Jacob... but it seems we have a "twist" here... better hurry up with that "needling clean" rehab or you will be forever gone into those LSD eyes... hmmm is her name "Lucy"... just saying... ;0) This is a fun write Jacob and now I must go to get drunk on a poem by 'barleygirl' (pun intended)...

I know that was bad, but hey it's the weekend and all hell breaks loose on weekends not to mention "meth methodical breakdowns".. just make sure I am sober by Monday... thats Jacob

redzone

Posted 8 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Years Ago

her (barleygirl's) poetry is intoxicating, isn't it?

and yes, maybe the subject of .. read more
Your subtle , yet sly references to drug ingestion could equally apply to the modern approach to medical prescriptions. The multiple side effects now create their own form of dependancy, which is not so far removed from the message of your poem. Like all good parodies, this carries a strong serious message

Norman

Posted 8 Years Ago



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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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