everything here is perfect - your poetry is addictive - a love, more like an affair, that turns your world upside down, with the power to obliterate your senses and reason - a love that is against your better judgment, and yet you succumb to its spell - it'll take some length of time, for you to regain your senses, that is if you don't find yourself, hanging from the a certain height of emotional unraveling, great writing, jacob
Wow. I love your use of words. This is really great and shows the disjoint of heart and head.
What a difficult thing relationships can be.
Thanks for this excellent poem!
They say love cures all ills and certainly it is addicting! Difficult to turn away from it when it is standing in front of you. The metaphor is splendid here...and you followed it through every stanza. Of course, now I will be singing the rest of the day, "I was feelin' so bad, asked my family doctor just what I had, I said, "Doctor, Mr. M.D., can you tell me, what's ailin' me?" It's all your fault! LOL Lydi**
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
and he said "yeah yeah yeah , Good lovin""
thank you for your kind review...and bring.. read moreand he said "yeah yeah yeah , Good lovin""
thank you for your kind review...and bringing up such a good song ....those Young Rascals......
I always knew you had a poetry addiction Jacob... but it seems we have a "twist" here... better hurry up with that "needling clean" rehab or you will be forever gone into those LSD eyes... hmmm is her name "Lucy"... just saying... ;0) This is a fun write Jacob and now I must go to get drunk on a poem by 'barleygirl' (pun intended)...
I know that was bad, but hey it's the weekend and all hell breaks loose on weekends not to mention "meth methodical breakdowns".. just make sure I am sober by Monday... thats Jacob
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Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
her (barleygirl's) poetry is intoxicating, isn't it?
and yes, maybe the subject of .. read moreher (barleygirl's) poetry is intoxicating, isn't it?
and yes, maybe the subject of this poem is "in the sky with diamonds" i'll check.
Your subtle , yet sly references to drug ingestion could equally apply to the modern approach to medical prescriptions. The multiple side effects now create their own form of dependancy, which is not so far removed from the message of your poem. Like all good parodies, this carries a strong serious message
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..