when you can't say no

inspired by barleygirl's "just say no" but in a bit of a different direction....

when you can't say no

your skin as white 

as a pure line of cocaine

and the effect as enchanting

your eyes are pools of LSD

i want to trip into the enlightenment

and carry your flowers in my mind

a meth methodical breakdown of will

i am hooked on the deluge,

the flood of commitment i cannot still

rehab might be the only solution

but i am in constant confusion

because you are my prescription

and my heart says i can't quit you

though my reason, is needling me

to get clean.

erin-cilberto

3/12/16

Reviews

[Relic]

I've mentioned the word spells a bunch of times in reviews and that's what it is. Something that takes over. It can tear your mind from everything else, and sometimes ruin your life too. Its the first thing you think of in the morning and the last think at night. Your world revolves around it. You speak about it, you dream about it.

Love is a drug we all need. Its addicting. No methadone is needed if it doesn't work out. The broken heart is enough to teach us.

Nice one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Relic...appreciate your insights.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

A spot on perfect comparison of addiction to love. While many have done it, you do all the others justice and then some with this piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is very kind of you to say, KL...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

ah, you know I just don't hand out compliments.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, and that is why what you said means that much more.

[Abhilash Hegde]

fab! I loved reading this one.
Love-high just beats being high on any substance. It's like no high ever but also an addiction that can get dangerous and rob you of yourself.
These ending lines, say more than what meets the eye..
"and my heart says i can't quit you
though my reason, is needling me
to get clean."

Jacob, wonderful read.. thanks for sharing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Abhilash...

j.

[A hare off]

Sometimes cold turkey isn't the best thing but it's worth a try. Not quiting, drinkng. A big glass of Wild Turkey on the rocks will cure whatever ails you. Sorry about that...from one addiction to another. This was great Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your the Wild Turkey, a hare off...i appreciate the smile i got from your words.

[...]

Oh Jacob...this is a keeper. I love love love the contact buzz I got off of this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn.

j.

[alifeacoustic]

Superb Jacob. The lines of lines and life run so closely and parallel to each other in your writes that it is hard to distinguish where they merge, s they are so seamlessly done. Giving up your addiction is never easy, but when the addiction is the cure too, then my head just implodes with the complexities of your words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, alife.

j.

[Woody]

you're unbeatable, jacob. no one could've written this one but you jacob. love can be addictive and what better way to describe it?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review. Woody.

j.

[Érenn]

Could I just say WOW(oops already did it) This is such a great write, and I have to read Barleygirl's poem as well. Might even get another interpretation on this one. ^^ Your words are addictive to say in the least. So many lines I want to point out here make this write such a joy. Can't say no to such a treat. The occasional rhymes thrown in the mix makes this write even more enjoyable. Truly the analogy is superb!! Loved the write ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Errenn...

j.

[Carolynn]

This is such an amazing and I have to say an amusing analogy that just works so perfectly in a very addictive way - I really enjoyed this one Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Carolynn...

j.

[Marianne]

Oh, I relate....nothing more addictive than being in love....no matter the cost....there are more wonders to behold in every look and touch and whispered longing when spellbound by love that never fails....contrary to addiction of the kind which seeks to destroy. I totally enjoyed the metaphors ringing true to the sentiments portrayed in your fine poetry lines!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Marianne...

j.