tango shoe tangle

tango shoe tangle

 

 

such lovely insinuation

your tanned legs striding with purpose

my mind wanders,

the curb slips under my "walking on air" shoes

 

your lips curl just slightly smirking

i trip on your wink,

and end up sidewalk surfing

on your impish grin 

"no chance"written in deep blue, cement eyes

 

as you scurry past me

with brisk intention

my surfboard heart broken

shoes sealed to the would

 

that would not float...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/5/16

Reviews

[gabrielle]

Is it possible for two individuals to elegantly and gracefully dance the tango when the other dancer is wearing the wrong shoe?..just a thought.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

might be a little awkward, but they can do it...

thanks for the smile, gabrielle...read moremight be a little awkward, but they can do it...

thanks for the smile, gabrielle...

j.

[Nisreen]

There is something special about that tango between two

you feel like you would release and dance off alone

only to sit by and keep thinking
When is my next chance to second that

[jacob erin-cilberto]

exactly...my sentiments...dancing alone is no fun...

thank you for your words, RiverSided.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Great play on words....would/wood! Seeing someone pass on the street....a confident, young, good looking man or woman.....and a fantasy begins. Unfortunately, it quickly drowns. Love those "deep blue, cement eyes". Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi...

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Deep blue, cement eyes.....killer analogy .......wink....sink....then.... whew I'm thirsty....I need a drink of cool☺

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks Queenie...got a smile out of your reply...and maybe a wink that came with it.

j.

[barleygirl]

What I love most about your poetry is your obvious love of vocabulary, finding the perfect word, using words that deliver maximum imagery and impact. I also love the flirty playfulness of this encounter (get so tired of the heavy leering types). Even tho the ending would be classified as a "fail" . . . the read has been a great success!

Good alliteration: "slightly smirking" . . . "sidewalk surfing" . . . not to mention imaginative descriptions!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your kind review, barleygirl...

j.

[boblakin]

Picture perfect. Makes me want to scurry after those tanned legs.

Ah, those lost opportunities, how they beckon.

boblakin

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, boblakin...appreciate your visit...and the smile.

j.

[Érenn]

A temptress indeed leaving a lot more than making just this one float in the air and make him feel as he is in heaven, and then suddenly concept of gravity(reality) pulling him down to earth. Love the tango here really. Fun read. ^^ "Surfboard heart broken" now this is one way to portray. I like it ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Errenn.

j..

[highonwords]

wow man, honestly this poem rocks, it doesn't just tango - it doesn't just float - it surfs the highest waves of creativity

steph

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,

j.