guinea pigs and love equations

guinea pigs and love equations

 

 

 

for you i was a simulated relationship

a trial run,

scientific experiment, so to speak

much margin for error either way

made you feel safe,

 

and then love trumped the formulaic theme

the numbers went out the window 

with the breeze that blew out your comfortable candle

a flicker, then instability

i became matter that mattered

 

a test that couldn't be retaken

the pass/fail element composed itself

as empirical reality,

 

your stoic smile cracked,

the pen in your heart moved slightly

toward?

true or false

A or B

or C

or all of the above,

 

the lab filled with indecision,

your heart dissecting components of choice

as i waited,

 

probabilities on the table,

thinking forward and backward

all at once.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/5/16

Reviews

[Beccy]

Despite being the studied, practiced and theorized about since time began, love is and will always be the most inexact science of all.

Multiple choice,or no choice, all we can do is keep those guinea pig wheels turning.

You carry a wonderful tune Jacob.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Beccy---

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love....the test we can't study for. It's always multiple choice, isn't it? Sometimes graded on too harsh a curve if you ask me. Wonderful metaphor....but I can feel the pain between the lines. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, teach...i can pass if the curve is big enough!

j.

[andrew mitchell]

just wonderful writing jacob, yes if you are betting on love please gamble responsibly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.

[Ruth]

Wonderful piece...exploratory in its nature...I could feel the sense of anticipation and the experimentation...could feel both sides actually and that is the mark of a great poem and writer :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind in your review, Poppy....

thank you.

j.

[JayceeC]

Love is such a rogue element. It causes all sorts of changes to the best-laid plans. Just out of curiosity, did you look at the choices laid out in testing format?
A or
B or
C or
All the above

And perhaps you did and it was too much. Thanks for sharing. I've had some experimental catastrophes along the way. I'm just glad I finally found the right chemical equation...lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am glad you found the right equation too, Jan...from what you have said, sounds like you guys are a perfect match...
thanks for sharing...and for your kind words on my poem...

j.

[Bare trees]

Like a spell that wasn't supposed to be cast, love seeps in and everything changes. I love your view on this because its real and it happens. Probably more than we think.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pale.

j.

[redzone]

I liked these words, "a test that couldn't be retaken
the pass/fail element composed itself
as empirical reality,"... sometimes we try to analyse the whys and wherefores of love, only to find we are already in love and the possibilities and probabilities confront you head on... and you say uhho, now what?? do I go with it? or back away? I always go with D, all the above!! just to see what happens... hmmm maybe this is why I am still alone...

I enjoyed reading this poem Jacob, if past, sorry, if current, have a great reality (without those SATs and IQ tests)

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Curt...most all is past...appreciate your thoughts and support.

j.

[Mary Helda]

And then love turned nothing into something....from plain to special..from failure to a pass ,,from false to true, ,an experiment to an everlasting theory..... huh!!! the power of love...a well written poem...I loved it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mary...
j.

[Mary Helda]

You are welcome:-)

[Norman 223]

The laboratory of love has always been an experiment searching for the unknown. The foibles of the heart can produce some unexpected results.
I enjoyed your novel approach to this subject , Jacob, with a good catchy title to ensnare the readership.

Norman

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Norman.
j.

[...]

I love this! Perfect expression of what's really in charge. We might be captains of our ship but the ocean has emotion all it's own

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your response is better than the poem...so poetic...thank you. lynn.

j.