Cinderella's Eccentric Nightlife

Cinderella's Eccentric Nightlife

 

 

 

splayed legs, 

she's given herself again,

foolish knave spreading her freedom

 

but the soiled reputation

fills the cracks of what some call justice

others call necessary casualties of the night

 

when did America prostitute Lady Liberty

for pocket change,

then leave her stranded on an island

 

with a burned out torch,

and sore bare feet

because she left her glass slippers

 

somewhere she wasn't supposed to be.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/1/16

Reviews

[W.k.kortas]

Not what I was expecting with the title, but surprise can be a very good thing. The pivot from the rather comic opening image to the edgier finish is handled deftly. This is the good stuff.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, W.k....

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

The disillusionment palpable, the imagery absolutely great, gets the point across. Really great poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Lady Liberty will be crying before this election year is over. I am so unhappy with ALL the candidates on both sides of the aisle. The glass slippers are shattered and Prince Charming has left for parts unknown. Good one, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi....

yes, shattered...

j.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Yes, the race for freedom has left Lady Liberty feeling used!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Tomas.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

You can massage Lady Liberty's feet all you want. Her gait will never be the same.

A scent of jaded mist in the political breath.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Al...so true.

j.

[Gee]

America's perceived "arrogance" that it is without doubt the biggest,best,most powerful will never help its cause,and now you have Donald Trump aiding and abetting

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my god, we hope that doesn't really happen...our hand would really be Trumped---Jokers wild.
read moreoh my god, we hope that doesn't really happen...our hand would really be Trumped---Jokers wild.

thanks for the words and smile, Gee.

[Norman 223]

Although this was obviously written as an "angry" poem, I see it more as one of sadness that a great and respected nation has allowed itself to be manipulated by wealth and political ambition. Now a universal problem, unfortunately.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Norman...it is more of sad than angry....you got the mood.
read morethank you for your kind words, Norman...it is more of sad than angry....you got the mood.

j.

[writing mojo]

So much truth the weak, tired, and weary can only say..This a masterful piece, which capture your alienated message in such thoughts on breathlessness. Excellent piece

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, writing mojo.

j.

[JayceeC]

She has made a habit of the jaunts, and each time we seem to lose something. Now I'm wondering if it is not all integrity. Have we truly.progressed or is it just a word to quiet the masses? Nicely done j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jan...i wonder, too.

j.

[alanwgraham]

i'm not too good at interpreting (or writing!) this kind of poem but I have the feeling you are talking about the chasm between Americas founding principles and some of the recent blemishes on her character - guantanamo and Iraq come to mind. It is very good!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

quite a perceptive review, alan, you are quite a bit more insightful than you are giving yourself credit as being...thank you for your words...

j.