demure roses in an olive garden

demure roses in an olive garden

 

 

foxes invite hounds for cocktails

wagging tongues lounge on martini pads

sipping scents in brothel logic

 

 

and then all run rampant across a field of imagination

as eyelids close 

and ravished dreams

occupy predators' beds

in midnight confession.

 

 

erin--cilberto

2/27/16

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Love this one, Jacob. Some wonderful turns of phrase.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pryde...this was almost a throw-away...much appreciate the encouragement--
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Politicians and car salesmen....Idk ....it's what I hear.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah, yes, could go there...definitely could go there.

j.

[icelandicblue]

This makes me think of Looking For Mr. Goodbar.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Diane Keaton was so great in that film...thank you, Anne, for reading and commenting on this piece that i almost threw away---it still has a heartbeat thanks to WC...
j.

[Corset]

I have never understood the bar scene mentality, not knocking it of course, to each it's own, i'm just not into crowds and one night stands...but we've all been there, waking up with something stranger than you went to bed with..egads!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, never was into that either...thanks for your insights, Corset.

j.

[Érenn]

Ok I must have missed this one today when I went on reading rounds. This is fresh, as in very different from how you represent your work both in tone and imagery. I am not sure if I am hinting at the right thing but it does seem about a wild night of one night stands after having one drink too many and heartbreaks and all. Going to some motel and lusting and living the moments ^^ It's fresh definitely. And sorry if I ended up interpreting the wrong way. ^^'

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are no wrong interpretations, Errenn...poems and readers relate to each other as they will...i am glad you could connect with this one in some way...thank you...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Incredible images in this one, Jacob. Could almost be a description of a political gathering....I have been to ones that fit your words! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi...

j.

[W.k.kortas]

Ah, in my midnight confession...this is a bit more whimsical (at least on its face) than your norm, but no less well built and effective. "(B)rothel logic" is a poem in its ownself.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, W.k.---this poem appreciates your review...it hasn't appealed to too many...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

An unlikely coupling a fox and hound and yet how two extreme opposites attract. A nice clever intoxicating write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew....almost threw this one out...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

It's funny I can picture the imagery of people representing the fox and hound in a bar.

[Lyn Anderson]

My field of imagination pictures prissy people doing naughty things after the party's over. But that probably says more about my imagination than yours.:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that interpretation, KL.

thank you. your imagination fascinates me.
read morei like that interpretation, KL.

thank you. your imagination fascinates me.

j.