in a desert of truth

in a desert of truth

 

 

the cacti grow tall

where idle minds pour wisdom

through hour glass sands

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/26/16

Reviews

[dan]

jacob, hour glass = sand, desert = sand. What a clever way to intertwine the two brands of sand! You always write exquisite senryu (or is this haiku? nature?). I'm going to try to go that way a little more often. It's a good exercise for sharpening my free verse skills. Great piece of writing. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words on this senryu, dan... yes, this form does force us to be concise...that is for sure.

j.

[B. Boileau]

With a little patience comes wisdom. Tucked away in our minds waiting for the right time. This was fun to ponder J. I appreciate your wisdom in this piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow what a coincidence that you would pick this poem and talk about wisdom...i just at the same time was posting a piece called "the price of wisdom"--but then i shouldn't be surprised..i am always blessed with that twilight zone Karma.

thank you for your words, bill.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

And these are the days of our lives. Lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they are, Queenie...yes, they are.
thank you for your reads and words...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

A great write Jacob. I hate repeating myself but You are too good. lol I thought the cacti line also had a meaning like the truth is hidden or protected by the prickles of a cactus. It's there if you want it. But I agree with coyote and Lydia is always sharp as usual in her wisdom.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am just another pen in a pool of writers, trying to express what needs to be expressed, but i thank you for the kind comment...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

you are welcome jacob

[Lyn Anderson]

It might be me, and my disdain for politicians, but that is where this poem takes me, to the place where only prickly lies grow.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am sure that was in my subconscious....thank you, KL.

j.

[Terrence Chang]

Great write Mr Jacob. Deep meaning in this write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Terrence.
j.

[redzone]

you are on a senryu bender Jacob... in this case bending desert truth into hour glass sands, or is that watering cacti... either way good poetry...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Curt...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Idle minds remember what is important in life and while they wile away the hours, their ideas can fill that hour glass. You are having fun with the senyru form. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i don't usually do form except for haiku or senryu...and lately it seems that is what was mostly coming to me...i wrote a couple poems last night, broke out of the rut...will post soon...but yes, can't stop thinking in senryu or close to it, anyway.
thank you for your thoughts, Lydi.
j.

[Érenn]

With age comes wisdom, with patience you gain the ability to ascertain which is good or which is bad. An idle mind though is after a devil's workshop ^^ I like it ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, and god, i love that word, "ascertain"---

j.

[Carolynn]

There is nothing less productive than an idle mind - I love the way you captured this. Cacti grow pretty slowly and endure extremes. Wisdom develops slowly over time as well as we learn the extremes of good and evil - I really like this Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Carolynn...

j.