into the Wild

into the Wild

 

 

perturbed metaphors,

(angered at narrow minded realists

who only want safety in compliant similes

 

the risks within the rhyme

impertinence sublime)

 

they will find their optimism

in line with suitable suitors

and convey what messages

the word robbers covet

 

plagiarized comfort

a song remains the same

but with different outlooks and moods

 

here i am at the gate

letting the poem in,

and then with a smile

 

feeding it to the wolves.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/19/16

Reviews

[David Scott]

We romanticize the "wild". Yet, the wilderness is cruel and selfish. It is unforgiving and without conscience. So, we walk the oaths others blaze and pretend we are explorers. We feed ourself to the appetite of a careless society.
Maybe, just maybe the meal will at the least be enjoyed if not appreciated.

A profound write here Jacob. A bit darkly satirical, but well posted.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, David..
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh brilliant ending. I think of the drivel that is pop music and new movies, but maybe that's just me, it's where it brought me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh wow...yes, that certainly fits...perfectly...

thank you for your words, KL

j.

[Chris]

ah... the ancient troth of empowered enlightenment... in a well-suited-served trough for the enamoreds' slavered-consumption

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris.

j.

[Chris]

chuckling here...

[Dhaye]

I have been reading rants about it on another site because of poems being plagiarized and posted to other sites by those shameless people. I wonder why they want to be seen or known as writers/poets yet they can't write their own thoughts...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting perspective...thank you for your words, and yes, shameless people, but what goes around comes around, i am sure.
thank you, Dhaye.

j.

[Dhaye]

It doesn't happen to me in poetry sites (maybe because my poems are light and simple. Lol) but it happened at a social media when I posted something about my father on Father's Day. It ruined my entire mood that day especially when that person's post got praises as if the poster is the author of it. It was a tribute for my father...

[redzone]

hmmm Jacob, aren't we supposed to "starve" those wolves?? then beat them to the next county with our apostrophies and colons!!! maybe even stomp them with a few allegories (or is that let the allegories eat their a*s!!) in any case, it is only a low down MFer that stoops to steal words and not give credit... there is no excuse for it...

metaphorically speaking, Jacob you word thrashed this so and so...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too funny...thank you for your words, and the smile, Curt.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW....feeding our words to the wolves who will eat them and spit them out just a little differently...calling them their own. I hope you have not been the victim of plagiarism, Jacob. I have in the past and I felt violated....angry....helpless. Unfortunately when we post on the internet, the words are there for the taking. There is no honor among the untalented. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it was more a figure of speech, but that is lousy that you have been plagiarized...i am not sure, could have happened to me...but my thoughts on that is it is the plagiarizer's conscience....i know what came from my pen..

thank you for your insightful words, lydi..yes, no honor...when they take the measures of stealing others' creativity.

[B]

I guess there is an honor to a word
To always be true
Regardless of its emotion
And in some instances an untrue word could be so inconsiderate
For it is merely covered in a dress and within it owns to nothing

You place such a difficult concept to life

The honesty of speech
So much wisdom here

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Nisreen...nothing like honesty, for sure...

j.

[Leslie Philibert]

And this fine poem sort of confirms my last review; an exploration of lyric, the content embedded in literary talent, I detect a finely balanced critique here of poetry as such, or more a resigned wink at the literary establishment. A poem I enjoyed greatly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you again for your kind words, Leslie...

j.

[V]

I saw the title and was excited to read this because there is an old poem of mine with exactly the same one. But dealing with a totally different topic.
The content you provide here reads interesting, good point of view, I especially enjoyed the last stanza including also the very last line. Fine images you kind of throw to the readers, emphasising the wild you introduced in the title.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vanessa...

j.

[Érenn]

This poem felt unique to me, had a few rhymes, felt they were layers and yet it sounded wonderful.
Now my take on the poem is that, when we expose our thoughts or rather when we share our thoughts or views in front of others, the thoughts could be original or just a different outlook on something preexisting, we invite both good vibes and bad ones as well. But we took that chance, so we must also accept the consequences.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we must accept the consequences, but we must also take those chances to really live...thank you, Errenn.
j.