Consider the Source

Consider the Source

 

 

i'm abandoning reckless,

turning an oxymoron on end

 

pitiful love, turned spiteful like

to clothed bones of feeling

participles that actually found homes

a dachshund's breath bowling over

St. Bernard's cross disposition,

 

 

and lines that make perfect nonsense

to a heart that needs not read anything

to accept conveyance

of the silent screams of the possessed

 

and i thought affection really was a mortal wound

that could only be un-bandaged

never really sealed with a kiss

or understood with a percentage of wisdom

learned on-line at Wikipedia

 

where every truth written

is an absolute certainty

 

just like love,

and my unsubstantiated existence.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/19/16

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

An absolute certainty on line? Surely you jest! Is it real or is it all smoke and mirrors? Sometimes it's difficult to determine. Liked the use of grammatical terms in this one. lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah i have never found love a certainty...and sometimes not even my existence.

thank you for your review, Lydi..

j.

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like about Jacob`s work is the way he writes about writing ; like Heaney he knows that whatever
the content , the substance is poetry..so I love the oxymoron, the lines, the ironical pseudo wisdom
of Wikipedia. As one always get, fine poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for this very kind review, Leslie...your words are much appreciated---and encouraging.
read morethank you for this very kind review, Leslie...your words are much appreciated---and encouraging.

j.

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A very deep write, Jacob.

This appears to be about the existence of love and the bane of existence. This is a very complex write, Jacob. I would appreciate any greater insight you could give me on it.

I laughed at the wikipedia line. Oh, the boundless truth that can be found on the internet!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your take on it Doodley, just let it speak to you as it will...for a writer, that is great satisfaction if that happens.

j.

[B]

I feel a sense of restlessness
maybe this pressing need to have everything written out
then everything pretty much lost its meaning and essence
in matter of the heart
one thought no words were necessary
Like one's existence
i feel this mental wrestle with what is said and what doesnt need to be verbalized in any form
i could be so wrong lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

an interpretation by the individual reader is never wrong...you got the mental wrestle for sure...there is always that in the poet, isn't there?

thank you.

j.

[Insight "MH"]

The tone here reminds me of "Into the Wild" It has grunt volume in each and every line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that term, "grunt volume"---
thank you, Insight.
j.

[Insight "MH"]

It was by mistake I thought I edited it before posting, but it came this way, I never used this term before. :( Sorry for that. I wanted to say It has volume.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no apology necessary...i like the phrase..and i took it as a compliment...might be a great phrase in a poem...

j.

[Insight "MH"]

So it is like the apple that fell on Newton a nice coincidence. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

exactly.... i saw a sentence in a page of student bloopers...the student wrote (speaking of apples) that william tell shot an arrow through an apple while standing on his son's head"

[Insight "MH"]

lol, that is odd, but makes me think that in many ways you can view something when you take a step back and look at it from a different angle.

[Brittany Bostic]

Your words are so incredible. I am always so impressed with how you use them. Considering where things came from...where we are in return and how we all compare ourselves. Insightful and bewildering.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Brittany.

j.

[redzone]

had to come back to this poem Jacob cause didn't know how to comment on it... read several times and still don't actually, cause your words take me from smiling at an upside down "oxymoron" (there are many of them these days aren't there) to a bit of sadness with those last two lines.

originally I was going to make my usual (witty?) half serious comment about thinking you were watching too much Fox, CNN, MSNBC news but thought that perhaps this time a quip really didn't get at the tone you were setting.

I guess what I am trying to get at is that we love and often lose in our attempts, that is we make a mess of it and are lucky to survive and be able to love again... is there "truth" in this??? I honestly don't know, but I don't think our attempts to, or love itself is either absolute or "unsubstantial" and neither are we... Hell, wikipedia, even with all its footnotes to prove something has no friggin' clue, except dry boring rote (footnoted of course)...

we humans are emotional creatures, we love and we hate and everything inbetween and we turn "oxymorons" upside down and inside out... but we are never even in our apathy, "unsubstantial" ...

sorry to go on and on Jacob, like many of your poems I kinda get lost in them and have to sort things out some.. lol I really loved this poem... ah, and Jacob, maybe it would be good to lay off Fox, CNN, MSNBC for a bit... ;0)

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

funny you should say that....i never watch any of those..much too slanted...but yes, several good bits of insights in your reply...i like where you took this piece...you often give me reflections of where i was going that even i wasn't aware of.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

The opening supports the ending where metaphor reels in the perplexed state of self. Grand use of metaphor which is one of your fabled talents. You are like a locomotive steaming ahead going on and off the tracks and never falling.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, i fall plenty, Al...but i appreciate your kind words,

j.

[Carolynn]

Hmm this is a very deep thinker Jacob. It makes me think how some people use their acquired knowledge (on Wikipedia or elsewhere) to make anything they say sound intelligent even if it's a load of smelly dog breath lol - I've been around a few people like that and I usually need to leave the room for a breath of fresh air :) I like what I got from your words - uniquely put together as they always are :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your thoughtful take on this piece, Carolynn...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Everything in Wikipedia -- uh huh, that's about the speed of where we are at today. Another insightful write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KL

j.