Art on an album cover

Art on an album cover

lips beating,

hearts kissing

words breathing

lungs speaking

eyes listening

ears seeing 

the music,

is you

the fusion of it all

is us

mind functions

fracturing injunctions

mind over heart matters

the former rules

goodbye becomes the hello

never said,

last rites felt

a song of how

we never met.

erin-cilberto

2/19/16

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

I liked the staccato lines...they set a great rhythm for your words. "goodbye becomes the hello
never said" Loved that line! The rhyming was super in this one....could be a rap song! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

What a concert in human togetherness, all there yet no one in close proximity. Talk about the groove in the poet's music, let all stand and give applause!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.

j.

[Jon Roggie]

Now, my Car's poem seems a bit tawdry.
Nice write, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jon, but your poems are never tawdry...

j.

[redzone]

"you say goodbye, I say hello, hello"; "You say why, I say I don't know"... Beatles, you poem reminded my of that Beatles song, that musical fusion that both defines and reflects our loves... "you say stop, I say go, go, go".. I guess too if this is "art on an album cover", then it would perhaps be another Beatles thing "The White Album" especially with "never meet" last line..

Good one Jacob

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"hello, goodbye, hello goodbye" "))))
yes, a simple cover, that white album...blank space as if waiting for a bit of poetry to adorn it.

thank you for your words, Curt.

j.

[richy]

Dante's writings of love unattainable comes to mind but this is love without attempt. There's no longing just acceptance of what could be. I feel these moments happen daily and you captured it well. Thanks for posting.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, richy.

j.

[Carolynn]

The Rolling Stones album cover comes to mind with this poem :) I really love your play with ears seeing and eyes listening which is true when you find yourself absorbed in the music. Words with music attached really brings the story to life - I get lost in the words often :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carolynn...curious to know which Stones' cover this reminded you of?

[Carolynn]

You got me on that one but after googling it I see sticky fingers was the fist album to use the lips logo - I haven't listened to them for a while but enjoyed their music :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when you said that Sticky fingers had been the cover that came to my mind too...

[Érenn]

You know it's just my interpretation again. I could be wrong. But this felt like the man was in love crazy love. Feelings, thoughts, words all jumbled up. The very idea that since she's in front him but not beside him makes it all the more crazy. His need for her to make him whole, to make things not crazy, to get things right on track. But never had the courage to speak or maybe he couldn't speak. She went away he was left alone. Well in the end the meeting was never really a meeting. ^^

That was my interpretation. Now for the poem itself. The word play amazing, this poem felt so lyrical and as usual loved the write ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like that interpretation, Errenn, thank you....

appreciate your words,

j.

[alifeacoustic]

Your description here Jacob is obviously from a vinyl album cover, as I remember them fondly, taking everything in and absorbing the artwork, compared to cd's or download today. Maybe that is what we are missing, the need for better artwork on our albums.
I love how you turn it to a song of how we never met, it has a beauty of it's own with just that last line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, alife.

j.

[AYVID N]

A love affair all in the mind. Sometimes feelings just stay inside and things just don't come to pass. I much appreciate the word play, the use of opposites in this poem. Much appreciated Jacob...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, DIVYA...

j.