director, in-absentia

director, in-absentia

 

 

 

we were billed as co-stars

in the film of our love

 

but you overacted trying to steal the show

and all you succeeded in doing

was stealing my heart,

 

leaving me feeling like a low-paid

extra

keening in the background

of a movie set 

 

filled with props of self-worship.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/5/16

Reviews

[Érenn]

It's a lovely poem and as usual it leaves an impression on me ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Errenn.

j.

[Ruth]

This is both gutting and palpable, you always stir your reader :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Poppy.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

The most demanding parts are in real life; the best actors, everyday people. Street critics quickly sniff out bullshit and force faulty players off-stage. Out here, screen stars often become extras, while extras take top billing.
That "film of love" was just a bad gig for you, Jacob--didn't showcase your depth and versatility.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind review...siskel and ebert gave me a thumbs down, years ago...:)))

read morethank you for the kind review...siskel and ebert gave me a thumbs down, years ago...:)))

j.

[redzone]

overacting in a movie is one thing, they have scissors to cut scenes, but in life that scissors means a bleeding heart... OUCH!! and in life, deep sadness.. even in the movies you break our hearts Jacob.

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Curt...

j.

[David Scott]

As an armature actor, I had to smile as I read this Jacob. I feel we are all guilty of this at times. At least I know I am. Maybe it is just a type of personality, but this happens far too often. Maybe we just need a better director. It can't be all the actor's fault, can it?. ha.

Great to read your thoughts here Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, let's fire the director...:)))

thank you, David,

j.

[David Scott]

Ha... We might get excommunicated... I guess beggars should not try to be choosers if they wish to eat even the crumbs?
It is so tasty.

[Alfred Kukitz]

The lines of each actor stand alone in a field, no connection, no movement into the now of the moment. The scene loses itself to ego and two lovers part because of self's singular urge.

Nice write Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Al.

j.

[gabrielle]

Ideally, being in a relationship should allow the partners to nurture each other and to grow together and not to make the other feel inadequate. But then, we don't live in ideal world. There will always be those self-entitled individuals who value more their pride, ego than the relationship.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do not live in an ideal world do we?
thank you for your words, gabrielle.

read moreyes, we do not live in an ideal world do we?
thank you for your words, gabrielle.

j.

[boblakin]

Box office success doesn't necessarily make a good movie.

Well chosen words make a good poem though.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, boblakin...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Any good relationship has co-stars and no leading lady or leading man. The metaphor here is fantastic. Too often ego gets in the way of a good relationship. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi..

j.

[icelandicblue]

And that is how critics are born... As always you weave your imagery into a seamless vignette.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Anne.

j.