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spit shined, patent leather smoke

emotions on fire,

4th grade sway

 

she passes my desk, 

i stare into the inkwell,

no words, just a crimson face

embarrassed expression mum

 

i write her beauty in my mind

young heart aflutter with intentions

dreaming during recess

of access to her smile

 

but i know for me,

there will only be a passing fancy

she won't notice my trembling pen

 

trying to get the courage

to whisper "hello"

into her waiting arms

 

and the lips craving to be part 

of her lunch---

 

so i can carry her books home from school

for the rest of our lives.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/7/16

Reviews

[Scrap]

This is sweet. I am definitely no 4th grader but id love to experience that right now. Im still an innocent, inexperienced and naive heart. Even at the age of **

[jacob erin-cilberto]

me either, Scrap...i am in seventh grade...got held back about fifty times...ha ha...

thank you for the smile.
j.

[redzone]

4th grade, her name was Donna, I did get to carry her books home from school and then she bit me and ran away... remember we would send our classmates valentines cards, well she sent me one of those BIG cards instead of one of those usual cut out ones.. it was a lacy heart with a big "Be Mine" in the inside... I guess I tasted good or something.. lol. But my big crush came crashing down cause she moved away the following week... is it true Jacob you get "bitten" before you get kissed??

wow, memories from a long time ago just leaped into my head.. thanks Jacob.. perhaps I should have taken this as a sign I would always get "bitten" when it came to love... funny how different 4th grade experiences can still end up in the same place...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i guess it must be true...she took a bite out of love...Love at first Bite...

loved your story...oh Donna, oh Donna..."since she left me, i've never been the same"

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

A sweetness beyond sugar & honey. It reminded me of Bernie Hacker, my first girl friend, who I walked home before catching the bus.

Bravo Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that, Al..

appreciate your visits..
j.

[Ruth]

Beautiful Jacob! The inkwell gave me a sense of nostalgia and the "access to her smile" is such a sweet visual and the carrying of the books for the rest of time reminds me of such a time of innocence and all is possible in the heart :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she was cool, i was afraid she would laugh---would love to have told her about the crush at one of our reunions years back, but cancer got her first---oh well...life drops us into that inkwell sometimes.

thanks for the words, my friend.

j.

[daninstockholm]

ahhh, yes.. I had such a crush once or twice,and yes, I did carry her books, it was quite bittersweet. , (not to mention an affair with one of my college instructors, but that's another story).. nicely done, my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing, dan...i appreciate your words...
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

This one got an "AWWWWW" from me. Puppy love....almost always unrequited. One person feels it more than life itself and the other is oblivious. So it shall ever be. The image of carrying her books home brought back memories for me. I liked this. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she never knew i liked her...i was always too scared to approach her---

thank you, lydi.
j.

[W.k.kortas]

I suppose there's a reason that youth is wasted on the young--you reach a certain age, and it's too much to bear. The horrible hunger of youth, well writ.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, and the smile, W.k.

j.

[Nisreen]

Oh my
This is just stunning
i love the last line

Oh how romantic
i love it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, RS.

j

[Einstein Noodle]

what a marvelous revisiting of the 4th grade for me .. i remember her still ... she captured my heart for the better part of grade school ... finally breached the chasm in secrecy using invisible ink from the downtown hobby store ... she knew it was me but i was still to "crimson face(d)" to own up to it ... i love this poem ..perfect for the Valentines coming up ..thanks for sharing jacob!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing your story, E. yeah, it's like that, isn't it?

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep! ;) by the way "patent leather smoke" is bursting creative writing says i! conjures so much all at once.. nice one!

[Norman 223]

I had all those feelings and couldn't concentrate on my lessons. Now I know the reason. Your extra curricular lessons really work. Thanks Prof. Jacob.

Seriously, though. This was a lovely poem that brought back a lot of adolescent memories.
Norman (85th Grade)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing, Norman...appreciate your visits,
j.