a plaintiff's dream

a plaintiff's dream

 

 

 

i want to court you

sue for back sentiment

 

 

my lawyer thinks he can get me

a forever's worth

 

 

you are trying to play the system

but i just want us to have a life sentence

 

without chance of parole---

and more time added for impassioned behavior.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/3/16

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Good Luck!--once these matters go to court (especially, Family Court, which is no court, at all) most marriages have almost no chance of surviving. The "court" has a vested interest in pitting one spouse against the other. How else can these ambitious bureaucrats justify their miserable existence--and continue to reap financial benefits for themselves and their suck-a*s cronies--but by assuming control over every family member?
Apologize for the mini-rant, Jacob.
Your poem is lovely, clever and perceptive.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really enjoyed your perceptive rant, Jimmy....thank you for your reaction to my work...
read morei really enjoyed your perceptive rant, Jimmy....thank you for your reaction to my work...

j.

[iand63]

For some reason this evoked me to think of Lou Reed's Satellite of Love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for that, ian....thanks for your extended visit, hope you have a great day,

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Being a judge in these matters I hereby sentence you to a full life of passion with occasional breaks for talking, laughing, listening and loving.

Court adjourned!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i'll take that deal...thanks, Al...:)))

j.

[Troy Henson]

Aint love grand?! For something so free it can certainly have it's day in court:)

Like this one J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Troy.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Smiling here....I showed this one to my hubby and even HE liked it! Hey, for years I wanted to sue my legs for non-support! :) Great metaphor, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

:)))) ha ha, thank you, my friend.

j.

[Ed Hart]

love grants freedom because it is already free...only the free can love, the needy go to court to plead (guilty)...clever language jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ed.
j.

[W.k.kortas]

Ah, that last line is a killer, though sentencing guidelines rarely work that way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true, thank you for your take, W.k.

i'll try to work on getting this love justice thing straight...:)

[redzone]

BANG!!!! so goes the gavel... GRANTED cries the judge!!! hell, Jacob make it double that life sentence... throw away the key... so Jacob, where do I go to commit such a crime?? I am in bad need of jail time..

and again you amaze us with poetry!!! damn and you're a criminal!! hmmm is that a Michael Jackson, "Smooth Criminal" I hear coming out of the screen?? nah, just a "smooth Jacob doing his "thing"

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too kind, Curt....thanks for the smile....

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

Guilty I cry!! but I can't afford the damn lawyer :}

nice one jacob!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, E.---:)

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

you might enjoy this one if i may shamelessly plug it:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BorgLackluster/1717786/

it my attempt at metaphor of a lawsuit :)

[.]

I really like this one!

What can I do to get more time added for impassioned behaviour?
A sweet little piece, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Doodley...

j.

[Cryingkate]

Sounds like too many loafs in the oven, Someone just might end up at Leavenworth prison :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha....yes, that place...thank you, Connie...

j.