a meteorologist's error

a meteorologist's error

 

 

big flakes

little accumulation,

a bit like our love,

 

a foreboding storm of passion

then just a small ration

of cold kisses

 

trepidation of trust

and a briefly frozen heart

melting in the opposite direction.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/8/16

Reviews

[Érenn]

I am not sure what I stepped into. Almost feels like there's a harsh shower and words are pouring down with the emotions as well. Sad really when what thought be such a good day ends up to be a bad prediction and things just don't go your way. Love can really be that harsh. Emotions which used to come as a downpour have become so scarce and parched, almost as if a famine has taken over. Then it's all about the frozen tundra and how you move poles apart from each other. Thank you for sharing This was really touching.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

lots of cold in between...hard to move through the frozen tundra...thank you for your words, Errenn...

appreciate your insights...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

you are love's maestro jacob ... the metaphor is strong all the way through ... and the story sad and poignantly touching .... so many times those in the scene are blind and don't see it happening when even the weather men and women can predict it right ;) what stand out most for me is that the lovers hearts are melting away in different directions ... not frozen and locked up tight .. so they have a chance with love still ... at least thats the way i read it .. your gift with metaphors is remarkable ..a treat to read!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, E.....thank you for your words,

j.

[Norman 223]

There is a sadness in your metaphors. Great expectations - little return. But perhaps that's how we learn to accept the balance of nature. The depth of your poetry just softens the rawness of the situation.
Norman

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Norman...

j.

[iand63]

Meteorology is the best job to have, "Hey, who cares if your wrong, have this large wad of cash".

The fickle heart cares nought for convention,
It's intention is pure though oft unsound

Quiet but insightful piece J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very smart words, ian...appreciate your review...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Life is always full of surprises and even if we think passion will explode, it often fizzles. How you manage to create as much poetry as you do and always find just the right metaphor for your thoughts is so impressive. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

lydi, thanks so much for the kind words, but i really don't take credit too much for what i write...i am just a conduit...the ideas and lines come and i write them, but most of the time i have no idea where it comes from or why...but thank you so much for your kind review.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

No matter where it comes from, it comes to YOU and through you. You share it with us...and I thank you for that.

[paddy d daly]

I can reciprocate Jacob,
Well written as always. .p

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, paddy...
j.

[David Scott]

Well, could we be too smart for our own good?
I miss the days of opening the door and stepping out on the porch to find the weather.
(Use metaphor freely here).
I can imagine more than a few ladies reading this poetry and thinking how nice it would have been to build a snowman... Ha.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, David...

j.

[Carolynn]

Oh dear what could be worse than cold kisses. Nothing worse than knowing someone is just going through the motion and you know there is no Emotion attached. I really hope things warm up quickly :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Carolynn...

j.

[redzone]

do we ever see those cold fronts coming Jacob??? seems like in spite of storm warnings all we ever see is warm sunny skies until the snow, rain and cold slaps us in the face.. and here we are without a winter's jacket to bundle up in... brrrrr it's a bit chilly in this room Jacob, mind if I move on down to Fla, or someplace warm!! wanna join me? we can sit on the beach and pretend not to look at all the young women in bikinis walk by... they don't get snow down there, just a bit of hurricanes... lol

love your poetry Jacob

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i really appreciate your insightful reviews, Curt...

thank you for your visits.read moreand i really appreciate your insightful reviews, Curt...

thank you for your visits.

j.