Paper trails and Semantic illusions

Paper trails and Semantic illusions

 

 

i wanted to write the greatest love poem ever,

but then realized,

i had no subject.

 

it appeared i had been a direct object 

all my life, 

a transitive heart

set upon with adverbial duress...

 

and then i would write with dark adjectives

and foolish interjections

 

i wanted to write the greatest love poem ever,

now i'm just grateful my pen moves at all.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/26/16

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

The first stanza is just genius work. So much so I could not help but laugh because its so true! The irony of it all it wasn't the greatest love poem but was a great poem on wanting to!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

:) thank you, andrew....ah but to write that great poem...we can always aspire to do that.
it is motivation.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

It certainly is J but you are already there! :)

[daninstockholm]

i can relate to this sentiment completely,, but then you know that, you've read my work.. lol.



i wanted to write the greatest love poem ever,

but then realized,

i had no subject.

Lines full of possibilities and numerous interpretations. Very well crafted!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, dan...yes, i know you understand this feeling...you are a poet...we always are our own worst critics, never satisfied.

[daninstockholm]

so very true... You're welcome.