toiling in poetic traction

toiling in poetic traction

 

 

there is a giant tomfoolery

happening in the factory of appearance

manufacturing sentiment,

words by piece-worker poets,

 

the 9-5 formula

writing with short breaks

but too long lunches

 

&

 

at the end of the shift

punching out the typewriter

the key to saving the day

 

and maybe a good poem or two

the laborer could be proud of...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/23/16

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

Not having been a peace-worker, my preferred tomfoolery once consisted of punching out any pushy supposed bosses. I believed they should toil in actual traction,
Punching the keyboard has, of late, been far more satisfying--stress relieving. (Although, there are times I really kinda miss my old typewriter.)
Your Factory of Poetic Product metaphor is quite apt and most entertaining.
Gotta go, now! The shift just ended.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, the shift just ended....good one.

thanks for your reply...and yes, i miss my old typewriter, as well.

[Corset]

it would not do for me to have a computer available at work and have this place open 24 / 7, i would not get any work done, as it is it constantly makes me late at lunch and in the mornings, poetry is ...well it is when it wants and it isn't when it doesnt, if you cant type it when you think and hear it, one kinda just misses the verse boat.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that verse boat leaves shore without us when we don't hop on board...so true.

thank you for your sharing words...Corset

j.

[Corset]

thank you for sharing yours J.

C.

[Alfred Kukitz]

My Mom worked in a clothing factory. I believe her poems were one inhale, one exhale, 30 years of sun risings but never catching the rhyme or reason of it all.

Your prolific output mirrors the intense shine of your soul. Always a pleasure Jacob!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that about your mom...yes, no rhyme or reason...

j.

[J.A]

Interesting how you made writing seem like a job. Also the idea of writer's block in the lines
"writing with short breaks/but too long lunches". But at the end of the day, still proud of the finish product.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we hope to be proud yes, a poet's wish.

thank you, J.A.

j.

[iand63]

This reminds me of reading and researching the furore that arose around the term 'Sunday Artist'. But this is a valid question what define someone as a poet? When can they legitimately use this term? Is dependent on quality? Quantity? Knowledge of the rules? The amount of time we spend writing? There is so much that gets dismissed when we get hooked up on labels. Provocative piece J really like this one.

[iand63]

So called rules I meant to say

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your extensive and insightful review, ian...

j.

[dan]

There seems to be a tendency in some circles to feel the need to structure pieces of work with fits and starts and geometric designs in the poem's presentation. Now I DO believe that there are ways to use herky-jerky structures in such a was as to enhance the emphasis on certain lines/couplets; others seemingly detract from proper emphasis. Poems are not Sudoku puzzles to be solved.
Very nicely done, sir! take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they are not Sudoku puzzles....i like that.

thank you for your words, dan.

j.

[Brittany Bostic]

It's quite interesting all of the work we put into our pieces and then what comes out at the end. It's something to be proud of. Sometimes we get caught up in the formula's to create and if we are doing it "right" too often. We should think about our words and what they mean more often then the formula's themselves. This is not math after all…

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is not math...thank you for your words, Brittany.

j.