wings being relative

wings being relative

 

 

Memphis moment painted in dark crimson

a rising star

falls from a sky laden with bullet brevity

 

there was still a moon to climb

but he only made it to the second floor

of that treacherous mountain montage

 

before he flew away in a dove's mouth

leaving an interrupted road

littered with flyers

for his next speech...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/18/16

Reviews

[V]

Again, another nice poem. I really like the crimson and moon line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, mimi

j.

[-inactive now-]

From this I got the image of a rising star or public figure slipping from grace or struggling to accomplish reaching what they strove to reach... It was a pleasure to mull over. I admire your writing, Mr Erin-Cilberto.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Josiah...
j.

[JayceeC]

This feels like you were talking about one of the gazillion republican candidates. I like this, however, because it really could be any bird that just did not quite find its wings, or misjudged the air currents and never got quite the lift he needed. Of course, not dodging bullets is not so good either.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jaycee...

j.

[Corset]

So sad , when it comes no one knows and if they want to live they never are ready but if they are ready it doesn't come, this makes me sad about the eagles band member Glenn Frey today no longer here to bring us the music, such an inspiration to so many.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Corset.

j.

[David W Moore III]

Very nice. The imagery is well done, still maintaining a potency belied by its brevity.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, David.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Culture seems to live in a day time soap opera story while those on the far side of it either paint destruction or add enlightment to our heads.

Coexistence a rooted problem.

Regards,
Al

[Jim Gill III]

Wonderful word-play and imagery! A powerful tribute to a powerful spirit! Thanks for sharing your talent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jim.
j.

[A hare off]

Never quite making it to the top, but far enough in his opinion, as he takes the easy way out and hopes for the best. Really good Jacob. I almost thought politician as I read this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, A hare.

j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I hope the promised land was everything he dreamed and more. The land he left behind is still weeping.

This poem is truly beautiful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for that thoughtful comment, Linda Marie...yes, we are still weeping.

j.

[B. Boileau]

Amen... your words are always flawless
his beacon still shines

B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, and yes, it still shines.

j.