adverbs to the finish line

adverbs to the finish line

 

 

in the soapbox derby of love

never had enough motor of heart

to propel me into happily ever after

just a coasting luxury of time

a drifting down hill hoping to gather momentum

 

then i saw you,

my boards collapsed encouragingly

wheels spun off ecstatically

careening into bedrock, vicariously

 

and my jet propelled illusion

sent me racing into an embankment 

of serenity,

 

that waited for me

to wake up,

momentarily.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/15/16

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

From the rush comes the crash eventually as emotions settle and come down to Earth! lol Nice write Jacob but I expect that:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew...you are kind.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

No! You are Good Jacob. lol Finesse and quality rides in your writes!!

[B. Boileau]

The dream of winning the race, winning the girl... then AGH ! spin out, awaken to find it was all a surreal dream.
Excellent!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, bill.

j.

[Ovi-Odiete]

Always an interesting Poet and Writer to read ..

You are amazing...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for those kind words, Ovi.

j.

[Ovi-Odiete]

You are welcome.............

[Relic]

The game of love is never a smooth one is it. All the horsepower and propulsion in the world means nothing until we find the right one. Always an entertaining read from you Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Tim...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

heartily, assuredly have to agree with the whims of love and gravity ... you make the wake up far less dramatic than the jet crash ... a tasty bit of unexpect ;) enjoyed the metaphor .. it rides the whole way through
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

really glad you are here j.

[-inactive now-]

I enjoyed reading that, I loved the soapbox derby metaphor! It made it fun to read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Josiah.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Enjoyed this piece, thoroughly.
You put it across, amazingly!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

"never had enough motor of heart

to propel me into happily ever after"

Either happiness can propel or sadness can expel down the finishing lines. The goal of the journey is love and serenity. Sometimes it is within reach and other times it is an illusion. An excellent write, sir...:).............

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sami.

j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome ..