kissing icicles

kissing icicles

 

 

 

you left me no wind to 

spit into,

your cold, calm demeanor

was an inert blizzard

of incapacitation

 

my hands froze to yours,

and

when i pulled off my gloves

my heart came off in woolen increments

of grief,

 

my throat left so dry

i can't even summon enough liquid words

to spit poems into the stillness

 

so i will try to mouth a snowflake

as you walk out that door,

 

 

my lips will freeze either way.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/10/16

Reviews

[Scott Thompson]

The truest test of writing is when the reader finishes it takes a moment to come back to Earth, to decide "where am I"? I had that feeling reading this...Great work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Scott.

j.

[MomzillaNC]

That moment of the irreparable fracture when someone walks away is as painful and sudden as an unexpected death. You captured that sense perfectly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Momzilla..

j.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw :D

[Penlady]

A clear description .....grief....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Penlady.

j.

[Asif Balouch]

I have no words as I'm speechless, a deep and powerful write indeed, as it is
"thy do not speak
Tho eyes said a lot
Shattered serenity
Made me numb and lost"

Thank you for sharing such marvelous write bravo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Asif.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I needed your love today as my rain caused flooding...but alas I see....she got to you first....freezing all your magic into that snowflake she wears around her plots. No worries, I shall return when the sun begins to shine and lavender blooms...tomorrow perhaps when your rosey and in the right mind of my musing😆 I've missed you so in my endings....even when they lead me right back...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Queenie.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

She must have cast a snowman spell on you. Now you have to wait for spring's thaw for the poetic human to come forth. I could feel the cold iciness gather round my head.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al.

j.

[Ruth]

Oh...this is so achingly powerful...the visuals blew me away...I simply can say no more than wow...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Poppy,
j.

[Mark]

Strong imagery, it shows life, passion in grief.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Mark.

j.

[Willard Wells]

A cold tale of lost love, but if it's that cold, better find another soon. I have lived and been in great cold and so I get a little extra chill as I read your fine words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Willard.

j.

[dan]

Many of us have braved that blizzard humming with the inertia of icy indecisiveness. And when the many have recognized that no amount of effort can keep our gloves from freezing the heartless feelings we are finally faced with...and powerless to combat.
Thank you, jacob, for strumming a tune I can hum along with. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such a great review....thank you for your words, dan.

j.